by SissyPantySlut
Thoroughly enjoyed the mystery and suspense. The final twist was great! Hope to read the sequel!
so impersonal and makes it all so lukewarm!
I try to use the second person mode to allow readers to more easily imagine themselves in the situation. It's a particular technique and not for everyone.
It appears you copied sentences from other writings and pasted them together to create this story. I gave it a 1, but in my opinion didn't deserve even that score.
Ok I am guessing a sister or mom who has a key to his apartment or a girlfriend , someone he knows for sure.lol. I don't think some strange woman is going to break in just to give him a blowjob, lol.