Superhero Origin: The Bull

Okay this was pretty hilarious

Liked it

Funny

Hope for another chapter

well...

interested, but way too short for my liking...

need more however, as i said, interested

Good start

Looking forward to reading part 2

What ?

So meany of the new writers can't write . only part of a story , whats up with that ?

thanks very much for the feedback!

Hey guys,
Thanks very much for your feedback on my first submission. I know it wasn't very long. I was testing the waters a bit and wanted to see what the community was like. Seems really positive! I'll put more chapters of "the bull" up.

I also have another hero who is mental in nature so the story's much more cerebral. I hope that doesn't hack off the fans of the bull who is a much more direct hero.

Cheers,
IWishIWas

Great stuff.

If there's more written, I hope you can post it up here. If not - write some more. This is good stuff and should be continued. Just sayin'.

cum on

these things happen to teenagers, usually the woman agrees to being cum on, this is great funtime when she is 'on' a slow tit fuck followed by giving it her in the mouth then icing those tits, it is really good if she says thankyou after you have cleaned her in the shower.. if not find someone else !!

Really not bad.

Eh

I thought it was pretty short, and while I thought you had a premise here that could be explored, I think that an editor might be useful to you.