Cool story, light on plot but heavy with description. I like the style it is written in and I look forward to reading more of your work. Would be great to see what you could do with a more complex idea, too.
I really appreciate the feedback, I am trying to write my first story with developed, speaking characters now, and getting a response to 'Adonis' is greatly motivating. I really do hope readers enjoy my ideas, and love hearing your thoughts =)
English
Good job
Cool story, light on plot but heavy with description. I like the style it is written in and I look forward to reading more of your work. Would be great to see what you could do with a more complex idea, too.
Thank you!
I really appreciate the feedback, I am trying to write my first story with developed, speaking characters now, and getting a response to 'Adonis' is greatly motivating. I really do hope readers enjoy my ideas, and love hearing your thoughts =)
Click here to leave your own comment on this submission! or
Back to Worshiping Adonis or
More submissions by SparkofDesire9.