All Comments on 'The Hot Adventures of Jack Ch. 01-02'

by James_Black001

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AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Good story

Good story but you could use some english lessons and a good proof reader.

JJgreenvilleJJgreenvilleover 11 years ago
Thanks for a Hot MC Story

I enjoyed reading this very much and I do hope you intend to make this an on-going series. The possibilities are endless.......................................

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
good start

decent story. question tho, how'd the main character start out with the name James, then become Jack?

oneof9oneof9over 11 years ago
Like it very much

You have a great start going. I do agree some prof reading could be used, but the concept is a very good one to go with. Plus you can go so many directions with it. I hope to see the next one soon

lacuskolacuskoover 11 years ago
hmm

if I was the man that was running away I would have injected myself..

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