I'm confused? Why is he being such a dick? And if she wants her freedom so much why is she letting him. That's not love. That's control.
Only one more chapter!?! This story has so much more potential than that.
I do love this storyline, and would be sad to see it end. Do you plan on continuing it in another arc?
I love these two. I wouldn't want to be in her position but I just seriously LIKE Emma. She's a fundamentally likable person and I admire her bravery.
I'm sad there's only one more chapter though.
But still lots of ground to cover, so I'm expecting the last chapter to be many pages long.
I can still see a redeeming quality here. He's like a tragic hero. Accepting responsibility that was foisted on him, in both the thug life and keeper of a slave. I suppose he reconciles his actions with Emma as the lesser of the two evils. If he hadn't accepted her, her fate would have been much worse. If he didn't keep her in line, others would, and somewhere along the line he's fallen for her but hasn't fully come to terms with what that would look like in a normal relationship.
Meanwhile Emma, alone in the world and far removed from the scared, abused and interrupted college student she had been, has just spent 5 years in purgatory trying to keep out of his clutches and also purge him from her system. But she was never able to reach a safe place and now the only place she can take a full breath and relax, is the only place that has a level of predictability and structure. With Jack, she knows what to expect and she has developed the coping skills to deal with it. With Jack she has a measure of worth because she is standing up to him. On her own she was a scared timid little mouse. With Jack, she can be a bird.
One?! Only one?!
Well . . . I look forward to it. This has all been fantastic, thank you. Please don't make us wait too long!
This series has been saved on my phone and checked daily. I did a happy dance when I saw this chapter. I'm sad there is only one more but already can't wait to read it
ONE?!¿¡ no, no, u cant just stop this could be a movie u cant stop i will be so sad it must go on and hurry please oh i the cops need to stay out of it OMG and leon i want to see jack beat his ass when will he take her out when do we find out what they do u cant stop it now u cant iv been hooked from day1
Thank you for this wonderful series. have read this series and watched the characters develop... cant believe that there is only one chapter to go.. I agree with everyone else you make this into a book.. please think about it..... in the mean time a wait with baited breath for the next chapter xxxx
i have been captivated by this story and like others have said, i hope that either it is a really long chapter or that you continue the story in some other way. i am enjoying the emotions that are in play with Emma and how she struggles with how she can feel so much with someone who is holding her against her will. it is such a complicated and interesting storyline and i hope that Emma can come to see and feel how much Jack does love her. i think that him talking to her at the end in this chapter was the beginning of that and i loved it. he stayed true to the strong and kind of aloof and private man he is while still trying to give as much as he could to Emma to make her see. thank you for sharing your talent here...we are eating it up!
This story is so engaging. There seems to be so much to develop and unfold. I've been waiting eagerly for this chapter, checking for it every day. I was so excited to see a new chapter post--and so disappointed that you're only planning one more chapter! I think this could be a very marketable novel if you had time to develop it. Thanks for sharing your story!
Wow! Was really happy that you had posted as I was desperate to see where this story was going and you have really surprised me! Such a struggle to find peace between them but such love too. So very difficult to write and I think you are portraying the difficulties well in a manor that's very realistic certainly in terms of how Emma would feel it. Emma's internal conflict is completely understandable and you illicit much compassion in how you write it. I hope the next chapter ( so sad it will be the last) gives us more of an incite into Jack as there is obviously a lot of history there. He is a Dom regardless of his place in the Grady pecking order, one could say he doesn't know any better, but having had his education it is a crime not to allow Emma hers and deny her ability to grow whilst still living the "lifestyle"! So there! And that's what makes your story wonderful, it makes you feel so much
emotion. Thank you so much for sharing.
The ending of this chapter was soo good, I just loved the way you wrote it! And what he said was just perfect too, that was just so great and sweet with still being his character. I'm disappointed there's only gonna be one more chapter because I love the story going on here, but I'll be eagerly awaiting your next submission!
Are you planning to do prequels? I feel like there is so much you could write about regarding their past you've eluded to. I'd love to see more on these characters.
to read it in Jack's point of view, even if it's just a 3 page chapter. Although I hope that his behavior would be explained in the last chapter of this series, there's still so much more that I crave to know. I love this story and I hope you write more stories like this in the future.
Jack's speech at the end was so full of freakin' crap, I cannot even stand it. I understand that Doms as a rule are arrogant &, well, dominant, but it is usually balanced with---with---with a core cognizance of the mental well being of their subs, right? I know this is a fictional world, Grady Park (which I really want to read more about!) but I cannot reconcile the word LOVE with anything of Jack at this point, oh-poor-boo-hoo-woe-is-me-history or not. (I can't WAIT until I see if I have to eat those words, after the next chapter!)
"this is all he knows..." says Marshall. But he has seen the outside world. He knows there is a different way. He's not a child. Regardless of how he was raised, he's intelligent enough to know better. Maybe there is some noble core reason for his staying to monitor the community but keeping Emma, unwillingly, because he thinks he knows what's best for her? UGH! Especially since we can see that it would take so little on his part to make her truly happy there AND HE DOESN'T DO IT. Selfish prick. (again, will I eat my words come the next chapter???)
As for Emma, I was really rooting for her in the beginning but she is just so ruined at this point, it makes me so angry!!! I cried with her at the train station....REALLY. I wanted her to push Jack into an oncoming train. She is so tragic to me right now. Maybe she will "flourish" and find some inner strength in the last chapter as a true submissive (& if we see Jack give her more than his foot on her neck) but as of right now, she resembles a broken animal more than anything else.
I can't even imagine how she got away in the first place. Did Jack let her leave? Or, even worse, had he been watching her the whole time she was gone?
My heart winced at the notice of one chapter left but I am praying that this world & all its possibilities are whirling around in your head, begging to be let out in written word. Thank you for sharing this world, it has evinced wonderful, STRONG emotion for me! Brava!!! or Bravo!!!
P.S. -- I was reading this on my Kindle but was frothing at the mouth with the need to comment so I got on my laptop and actually created a Literotica login! :) Trying to type all this on my kindle would've given me fits...
A little explanation can go a long way. Hopefully we'll see a change in Emma and Jack, that she'll be more accepting of her position. Also, hope to find out more about Jack's past. I can't wait for the next chapter.
but but but I wanted more with these too, one more isn't enough :( In all seriousness though, I really feel like the story is just building to it's main conflict and plot, not winding down. Please consider exploring more of where this could go.
Please rethink the one more chapter. This storyline has the drama for deep writing. There needs to be prequel things ...who took her and what was going to happen to Emma if Jack refused her. Who is this group and why is Jack afraid of them. Is it possible he could give her "MORE" of himself. What is is point of view on Emma and how he views the relationship.
Waiting with baited breath for the next chapter - and the one after that and the one after that. I've now read this whole story three times through. Your writing style and the detail in your character psychology are wonderful! Please keep going. When I see the next chapter is up, you will make my day!
Enjoyed your story, thanks a lot! Would like to read more :).
Where are you? I can't stand the wait. I have read and reread the story many times. Please hurry and submit more. This is my absolute favorite story on the entire site!
Loved your story, can't wait to read the end. Please, please, keep on writing!!!
Hello everyone, I really appreciate all the feedback and I just want to assure you that yes, I am absolutely going to finish this. Real life and a need to think about this story a little more are delaying my posting anything right now so please be patient. I promise I am not finished.
Please, please don't give up this story. I really would like to read the end of it! This is my favorite story to date in this section...
Thanks for letting us know, i've been checking lit everyday since your last entry and so glad that you aren't going to leave it hanging! love love love this story, just wish you were planning more than 5 chapters!
I'm speechless...quite the satisfying read...be well -- hcl
This is a lovely piece of writing with so much room for story development, I would be terribly disappointed if there really was only one chapter left, you've created do many possibilities please explore them!
I can see her internal battle - after over 10 years absence it took just one touch from Him & I was lost all over again despite everything that had passed in the meantime - sometimes some connections cannot be denied;-)
Please please please continue this! I'm early awaiting another chapter! I've loved every chapter of this story, and his little speech at the end of this one was PERFECT. I need more! Please update soon :)
Thank you so much, you're really a gifted story teller.
Don't end it, please continue to write more, or similar stories like this. I love it!!
Amazing, I like your way of writing. Please keep on writing, I am really waiting for it!
Greetings from Germany :)
Where are yoooooouuuuuuuu? Please come back and finish this story? It doesn't have to be perfect, and at this point it doesn't even have to be long enough to address all the open questions. Just tell us the rest of the story, PLEASE!!!!!
Please, please, please give us more! I need a resolution. I check on this story every day to see if another chapter has been submitted. Even just a little bit to keep it going?
Really, I am. But, it's such a cliffhanger! What happens to Emma and Jack? Why is Jack such a contradiction? What is going to happen with Marshall? How can they be happy and continue in this lifestyle?
Please come back. I'm begging! You are such a great writer. You have completely sucked me into this story. Please don't give up on this story. I hope you have other stories to come as well. Your talent is amazing. Looking forward for more to come! :)
This whole series is fantastic, I have it bookmarked - please give us an update soon!
When will we see Ch. 05???
I read it all last night and today during my classes can't wait for chapter 5
Dear MK, please let us know if there is more to come. If you are busy, maybe you could just leave a short note? I'm checking here almost every day, hoping to read more. Thank you for this great story!
Pllllleeeeeeeeaaaaaaase finish this, omg, it's so good!
Please pose again soon, i check everyday to see if there is an update, or even just comment giving an update....please
I loved this story, plz keep them coming
I won't deny that you have talent. I have thoroughly enjoyed reading this series, and as a fellow writer, I can spot talent a mile away. But, as a free woman who is currently battling her own demons and dark desires to become a slave (I am curious), I have to say, please please please let Emma leave.
It would be a far more powerful story if Jack let Emma go. And maybe even if after she had time alone to reflect, she realized he loved her and that returned to him of her own free will.
This is my first comment on literotica, a testament to your compelling talent.
When I read this, I forget I'm on Literotica. This is just absolutely amazing. You capture emotion so well and Emma has developed into such a strong character. I wonder what's going to happen to her, wondering about her struggle and all the emotions she's fighting, and it is just absolutely beautiful. Your writing is so powerful and this story is one I will read multiple times. I just absolutely love it.
I get if your busy but atleast post a comment to give us an update, its to good of a story to just end like this....
I hope you haven't given up because I still keep checking in the hope there is a new chapter!
This is an amazing story, please continue! I really want to see what happens next!
Please tell me you still intend on finishing the story! The wait has been killing me!
I think this is the best story I've read on this site. Interesting premise, well-drawn characters and good dialogue. The two main characters have chemistry and I enjoy the sparring between them. I hope you finish it and get them to a better place.
I absolutely loved this story, the writing was phenomenal and the characters compelling. I see that it was posted a few months ago. I am eagerly anticipating the next/last (?) chapter. Hopefully, it will be posted soon.
Please write more, you are a talented writer.
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