All Comments on 'His Big Tent Pole'

Well Done!!! Don't want to be hyper-critical, but you could use some editing on dropped words, grammer and use of adverbs. There IS a good flow to your writing.

Anon, thanks for your feedback. I'll be sure to pay particular attention to "grammer." :)

... and as a spelling and grammar fanatic - see my stories - I found nothing wrong with your 'grammer'.

But your anatomy, or something, is a bit weak. Either you have an unusual cervix, or he has a remarkable mouth.

And if 'throbbing eight inch cock' is a stupid cliche, just what is 'tight wet pussy'?

But I'll forgive you these two wee glitches in an otherwise lovely human tale.

Exasperated is the word I think you meant when you used exacerbated.

is correct.

You are right. Not that it matters a lot, but exasperated doesn't work without identifying what was made worse. You could stretch it to mean her emotional state, but exasperated fits better right away.

God I waste time!

Thanks for the good story Ms.

Before you go to that Workshop, try getting some advice from a good Editor and the help of a good Proof Reader!!

Thanks, Anonymous. So noted.

By the way, do you know of a good "editor" or "proofreader" I should consult before going off to that "workshop"? I'd really hate to embarrass myself any further.

Congratulations! The story was great and the author is both literate and a good story teller as well. Thank you. This gets an A+ from this teacher.

Good story & erotic and sexy

Nice not having to read about “throbbing 8-inch cock” for a change, except in passing!

Nice erotica, although I was given pause over the mouth on cervix passage. Dude must have prehensile lips, haha!