by JoshuaX
And a marvellous introduction to Literotica! Very well done - I thoroughly enjoyed this naughty tale - thank you for sharing it with us.
As a man who is kept in chastity, and who is enjoying the pleasures and the frustration of long term denial, while being teased frequently by my horny wife, I appreciated every word of this. Well done. You captured the situation perfectly!
A really good post! Fresh and exciting treatment of the Femdom scenario. I feel like there might have been a few typos, but the fact that I can't remember precisely indicates the story overrode the errors.
Good work. Keep it up. Thanks for posting
Sweet Jesus fuck, that was hot. :) You have a keen sense of detail and a wonderful way with the description of sight and touch. Welcome to Literotica indeed.
(Four and half stars, and the half star off is only for the typos.)
Thanks for all the positive feedback. It makes it worth it when folks enjoy my stories.
In addition to seeking an editor to help with those pesky typos, I am working on one or two new submissions, including part 2 of She's in Charge; I hope to continue to show this couples journney as they delve deeper into bdsm.
She has demonstrated by her behavior that she has no love or respect for her husband, so she has earned her divorce. Hope she enjoys it because NO ONE would accept being treated like that and stick around. What a bitch!
Lol!
What the heck are you doing reading bondage stories on an adult fiction (aka porn) site if you have a problem with something that tame? You, sir, win the internet tonight!
You'd get even better Anonymous criticism if you made the next story about a wife who ties her husband up and has sex with another man. I think there's a crowd of former cuckolds who ejaculate on their keyboards and then write angry things about the author, the wife character, and the husband (if he doesn't destroy and/or divorce her).
I've got no problem giving mean, ugly stories a raspberry, but this wasn't one. She sure did jump right in there, and was a little too fond of saying 'slave.' But those are minor personal issues for me. He definitely sought this and never indicated a desire to stop. She teased and delayed, but nothing was degrading and he got a happy ending. One of the most enjoyable femdom stories I've read.
Really very well told. She was the perfect loving femdom wife. She was playful, strict, and thorough. Knew him well enough to know he could handle what she was doing. The story reflected the love she has for her husband and how much she wants to make him happy.
Couldn't have been less clever.
Couldn't have been less interesting.
Couldn't have been worse.
It WAS just terrible, unimaginative drivel.
I really don't know why some people bother to read a story, pass a comment, if they then throw a tantrum & behave like a big girl's blouse. It's only a story for christ's sake. If you think you can do any better, go for it. I somehow don't think you could.
I hope it was all true and it led to much more. Two of my ex's, Mitzi and Denise started off as Dom and somehow made me more and more sub until I found myself becoming a very willing cuckold. For my own selfish reasons I hope this progresses in that direction. You can also read about them in my stories. I love your writing style and would give it 5 stars!
Good premise.
You need an editor. You wrote BARLEY when you meant BARELY.
Teasing not bad, but not great. Each instance/episode didn't contain enough details. and ended to quickly.
While she was sitting on his face, I don't understand why she didn't make him lick her to multiple orgasms. And give him instructions as what to do. And where. And how. Faster/slower/harder/softer/there/suck my clit. Ans all the while playing/jerking his cock ever so slowly.
Four stars.
She certainly knows how to torture a helpless sex slave. He didn't have a chance while she had him exactly where she wanted him. It is absolutely delicious to be under a sexy vamp's spell and not be able to do anything to stop her. How delectable is that!