All Comments on 'The Old King and the New Bride Ch. 01'

this was an excellent story

I only just finished Dealmaker and I really wanted to comment on that but forgot my pw at the time to log in and do so. SO>

I loved Dealmaker. You do make a few spelling and grammatical mistakes in Dealmaker and all your stories but it's always minor and doesn't detract from the story.

I really enjoyed reading this one and was glad I checked Erotic Horror today. I look forward to the next chapter and thank you for fixing the chapter thing. Reading the first few dealmaker series chapters was indeed confusing. I can't wait to read the payback of the mum. AND my fav quote about matching monogrammed nipple rings had me laughing loudly. Keep it up! :)

I really enjoy this post and the rest of your series. I'm falling in love with that King of Hell. Can't wait for the next post. Stayed up to 3am to finish.

Can't wait for next part :)

An excellent example of romantic erotic horror! I loved the line; "and we're off!" She's sweet and innocent but not annoyingly so. Has just enough clever sarcasm to demonstrate her intelligence but not enough to be bratty and petulant. And Lucifer... Yum yum yum!

Really great story line, that, although its premise has been done before (evil mother sells daughter for her own gain) you've applied it with panache to your story. Looking forward to reading more of this as well as the rest of your submissions.

Some grammatical and spell check errors that actually did force me to read again in a few spots. But the majority of them were easily overlooked.

This may be my new favorite serie's. Looking foward to the next.

I love your portrayal of Lucifer here. The I could imagine everything too. I am actually looking forward to see what happens to her mother. Great way to start!

the devil never sounded so good :)

and as long as you keep it to Title Ch. 01, ect etc they should be a breeze to find

my dear friend....i'm really wondering how beautiful a romance cud be aftr reading this...u must write a paperback fr ths...n get it published...by obviously deleting a few erotic details here n ther...

i wish i could give you more than 5 stars because you deserve it.

thanks

Gah, your stories are the best! Can't wait for your next chapters!

I think my computer screen is melting!

ARE AMAZING. I LOVE READING THEM. I WAS SO GLAD YOU STARTED A NEW ONE. KEEP IT UP. Just wanna say there may be a few typos and what not. But no biggy. Can't wait to finish reading the new chapter

Amazing! Your detail is impeccable.

More please?!

AMAZING! literally the best ive read yet. :)

Excellent story. I thoroughly enjoyed it.

Excellent work! Fantastic detail, well defined motivations, and the betrayal of Lucifer is magnificent! (Michelle is equally well portrayed, though without quite as much of a reputation to live up to.)

Too often longer stories get tedious. This was awesome and gripping from the beginning to the end. I look forward to the rest of the series!

Um, portrayal of Lucifer . . .

Fresh as always and I liked the 1st person pov :D

LOVED IT KEEP IT UP YOUR ONE HELL OF A WRITER

Great can't wait to read the rest

Kara! I love you!

I didn't really like Claire. I thought she was like a wannabe Kara.

This was the first of your stories I have read and Michelle and Kara are my favorites!

As a female reader, i really liked your way to describe main character, as i wasn´t constantly gertting annoyed out about how suberbly pretty, great etc she is.. it did let me have sme room with my own imagination about her and actually let me to even imagine myself to her place. I give you extra 10 points because of that.

As i read stories, i like to place myself in them, instead of maincharacter and usually its impossible because they are almoust always described out as inhumane perfect and stunning, i don´t like to read that :D

And i must give my apologies if my english is sturdy and blocky, as it is not my mother langueage.

Sincerely yours

M

Came here for the porn, am about out to fall into chapter 2 for the story. I'm interested, and you write very well!

Way too long and vanilla sex when you finally got round to it. 3/5 at best