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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous10/20/12

Dreadful

Illistrated?

Really?

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by Ellier10/07/13

you dick squeezer. this was so bad.

Go suck a dick then write better.

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by Anonymous03/07/17

Nice Hot Little Story….

The first few paragraphs were so hot and steamy that I had to Stop and start on the Review on this story.

This just proves that even a story as brief as this doesn’t have to be crap, or just a Stroke Story. Excellent job.
Furthermore I got to hand it to you even that this story is short you still where able to fit in a 3D Character. I just wished that you would have done for both and not just the one character

And the only other nip picks that I have is that I wished you would have also not only include an actual Picture of a gay coupling either that or just simply more images through out the story itself but also I wished that you have written a little bit of gay sex into it, not too much but just enough to give me some idea how they fucked. And what positions they fucked in. And of course also not too much it becomes boring and reprieve as well. At the same time I’m not sure if this story qualifies as a Non-Erotic story as well. And for one main reason, it is clear that at the end that the two men are about to have sex. This also feels to me like only a Demo or a part one of your story..

But as I have said overall a good short story with a character in it and not some random pawn for your story.

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