by MaitreNuit
Very empathic, very sad and romantic.
Great written. I never been reading such a thing before.
Thank you
Absolutely one of the best stories I've read! Great story . Just fantastic
Awesome. Brought tears to my eyes as I remembered my grief some time back.
I hope God gives you strength to go on.
What an amazing story. I had to read it twice, swallowing a lot of tears. You have captured the emotions and the tragedy of the events so brilliantly, I felt like I was witnessing it.
Tough stuff, made even me as a man weep like a baby.
In english just as well as in german. I like the english version much.
Kisses
Ava
It is a pity when a beautiful story like this is not properly proof-read.
Or could it be that the author cannot distinguish between to lie and to lay?
not HIM.the finally struck the final out, TK U MLJ LV NV
In spite of the sometimes labored and awkward wording and grammar in translation, the feelings came through throughout and overcame these problems. Poetic license extends to translation when the words are so clearly from the heart. Jon Taylor
Wow, amazing. Hearts splinter, that´s right.
I like it.
As Always a great job Maitre. I love both versions.
Romance is yours.
Please write more in this categorie.
you wrote it very well.
I will still know wether he is dead ;-(
Freddy
Your style and story telling skills are unique here. This cautionary tale should be required reading for all those in high school cliques.
Thank you.
I'm glad you liked this story, too.
I'm aware, I'm not a native speaker and no editing can be perfect. Things like "lay" vs. "lie" may slip, but as long as the story remains readable and understandable, there isn't much damage done.
@ Freddy
He is dead! No doubt about it.
@ anonymous 10
The story is depressing, sad and - agreed - not erotic... But don't you dare to dictate others what they have to consider romantic. I do think, some of them share my point of view that romance don't require necessarily a happy end.
@ all
Thank you once again.
Your
MaitreNuit
that is SO SAD and SO GOOD. Kinda embarrassing to say, but totally Made my chest hurt. Never take anything for granted.
but how did he die? That’s what I wanna know
I'm not 100% sure but I think it is clearly implied that he commited suicide seeing he died on the same day(valentines, 14 Feb) that the girl broke his heart
He may have died by his own hand.
But SHE'S the one who killed him.
Now she gets to lived with that knowledge for the rest of her life.