The Fragile Abandoned Ch. 02

Enjoyable - but

I enjoyed both parts of your story, but I find the use of "laying" instead of "lying" grating. Same with "I laid in bed" which should be "I lay in bed"

I know these are common mistakes, but they are distracting.

Nevertheless, looking forward to the next part.

Maybe Natalie came from the jet - it's not completely clear, and a bit unsatisfying. Would have liked it if Andy's cock had been right at Natalie's vagina just as he came, even if he didn't penetrate, then they could have worried if much of his sperm had entered her, and possibly made her pregnant - at least until her next period. Would have been a nice entry to the next chapter, and a better ending to this one. It didn't seem finished as written.

This is a great story.

I loved it . I need more of it . I almost busted a nut all over the place. Please try and give us, some more of this story.

Shuttering?

By the way, people don't close off windows when they cum, Mark, but that's what you said. Try shuddering - it feels a whole lot more intense.

"Andy's cock was so big, so veiny, and so warm. Truth be told, the size of him was terrifying. Taking that beast inside of me would surely split me in two."

Is this a sister who's in love with her big brother's big meaty prick, or what? I love how Andy's coming around to what both he and his sis Natalie really want to do. In this chapter the boy pressed his big hard cock against his sweet sister's belly and just unloaded his big brotherly balls on little sis. I bet Andy's got a much better idea of where to unload his balls.