WTF just happened ~~ short and to the point and then 'bang' it is all over and everything goes to hell-o and poof the story is gone.
Well for what it is worth I gave you a "5" anyway as I am hoping for a CH.2 and 3 maybe.??
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Anonymous09/23/12
NO GOOD
it reads like you left the middle out of the story the start wasn't great either and neither was the end. this basicly was a first draft that never shoul have been posted without A LOT of work and a GOOD EDITOR. i suggest you delete and rewrite it using a good editor or ghost writer.
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Anonymous09/24/12
Needs fecal transfer
Have the siblings transfer fecal matter back and forth using only their mouths and I'll give you a 5.
Sure, sure, I know... it just happened. Coulda happened to anybody. It was an accident, right? You tripped, slipped on the floor and accidentally stuck your dick in my wife. "Whoops! I'm so sorry, Mrs. H. I guess this just isn't my week."
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First off: To the anonymous that has the crazy fecal fetish, first of all it didn't head that direction at all and I understand people have their own fetishes but at least leave a review that the writer can go on for better writing later on. Now to the writer of this story I only gave you a 3 if I could have I would have given you a 2.5, this was too quick and there wasn't much plot that went into this story. Next time give it a bit more flavor so we can sink our teeth's into it.
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Anonymous09/25/12
I can't believe it took him two hours to figure out an alternator problem.
I want to know what happened! Good story, you seem to be a great writer. You've taken a ridiculous situation, completely unrealistic, and made it feel completely plausible. Excellent work!
English
WTF ..
WTF just happened ~~ short and to the point and then 'bang' it is all over and everything goes to hell-o and poof the story is gone.
Well for what it is worth I gave you a "5" anyway as I am hoping for a CH.2 and 3 maybe.??
NO GOOD
it reads like you left the middle out of the story the start wasn't great either and neither was the end. this basicly was a first draft that never shoul have been posted without A LOT of work and a GOOD EDITOR. i suggest you delete and rewrite it using a good editor or ghost writer.
Needs fecal transfer
Have the siblings transfer fecal matter back and forth using only their mouths and I'll give you a 5.
Comedic I guess...
Should this be listed as humor/satire?
and i give you a quote
Sure, sure, I know... it just happened. Coulda happened to anybody. It was an accident, right? You tripped, slipped on the floor and accidentally stuck your dick in my wife. "Whoops! I'm so sorry, Mrs. H. I guess this just isn't my week."
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Nihil novi sub sole
Story Rewrite
First off: To the anonymous that has the crazy fecal fetish, first of all it didn't head that direction at all and I understand people have their own fetishes but at least leave a review that the writer can go on for better writing later on. Now to the writer of this story I only gave you a 3 if I could have I would have given you a 2.5, this was too quick and there wasn't much plot that went into this story. Next time give it a bit more flavor so we can sink our teeth's into it.
I can't believe it took him two hours to figure out an alternator problem.
loved it
loved your story cant wait to se what happens next
More!
I want to know what happened! Good story, you seem to be a great writer. You've taken a ridiculous situation, completely unrealistic, and made it feel completely plausible. Excellent work!
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