These two horny teens have spent the night in bed and haven't done the deed yet? Except for some oral, all they seem to do is sleep. They sound more like a couple of out of shape middle-aged people than two kids bent on fucking.
Agree with Anonymous that even if Michelle starts with a blow job, Matt would naturally want to turn it into a fuck first, before getting big into oral. I know if I were still a teen, I would want to test that tight pussy before anything more playful! Only gave 4* because of the frustration.
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Anonymous11/07/12
agree with others
most writers rush into sex you seem afraid of it. get on with it already!
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Anonymous01/16/13
Please write more and next time make them FUCK!
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Anonymous03/09/13
more more more
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Anonymous09/14/13
Disagree with others
I totally disagree with others who have left comments. You write extremely well and considering the topic I think you're timing is perfect. I've never had a girlfriend who I didn't go down on first loooooong before penetration. I don't know what people think when they say siblings who have had secret feelings for each other would just be banging away like a bad porn movie. I love your writing, your tempo and your style. I hope you are still around and continue this story. If not, then that would be a tragedy.
This needs at least one more if not more chapters. This story is really good but don't leave your readers hanging wondering what happen next. Please keep the stories coming
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These two horny teens have spent the night in bed and haven't done the deed yet? Except for some oral, all they seem to do is sleep. They sound more like a couple of out of shape middle-aged people than two kids bent on fucking.
Frustrated
Agree with Anonymous that even if Michelle starts with a blow job, Matt would naturally want to turn it into a fuck first, before getting big into oral. I know if I were still a teen, I would want to test that tight pussy before anything more playful! Only gave 4* because of the frustration.
agree with others
most writers rush into sex you seem afraid of it. get on with it already!
Please write more and next time make them FUCK!
more more more
Disagree with others
I totally disagree with others who have left comments. You write extremely well and considering the topic I think you're timing is perfect. I've never had a girlfriend who I didn't go down on first loooooong before penetration. I don't know what people think when they say siblings who have had secret feelings for each other would just be banging away like a bad porn movie. I love your writing, your tempo and your style. I hope you are still around and continue this story. If not, then that would be a tragedy.
half a page is a chapter?
where is the rest of the story? No resolution?
meh
such a beautiful addition; but too short
these two have the entire weekend; HS, college, work, life ahead of them - the adventure has just begun. Need 50 or so more pages please
Thanks;
DKP
continue please
This needs at least one more if not more chapters. This story is really good but don't leave your readers hanging wondering what happen next. Please keep the stories coming
More Please
Good job well written just needs a few dozen more chapters.
Write more chapters
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