by kjplotts
are people we all need to hear more about. Good writing - hot story!
And some issues like: "inaudible sounds". Sexy, though. Keep writing!
Your writing is ... active. Fabulous work. The story just jumped off the page.
Thank you very much!
I loved the build-up and how she worked her seduction - wish more authors took time to build up the characters like this. Hope to see more.
A really good story, the build up was wonderful! Unfortunately, the sex was just sex; and not much more!
More depth would be great ...
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this one just had so much heat that it worked out right. Well done!!!