First off, the mistake was not made by Nick, nor has it made it into the plot yet. This and the next two chapters (unless I decide to combine them, which I might) are separated from the rest of the story by a significant leap in time.
Also, this is the first erotic story I've ever submitted so I didn't have a clue how many pages it would be on here, but it was four on my word processor. I'm not sure how I'm supposed to dictate where I foresee the chapters ending, but I ended this one where I thought it best to end. My apologies if you thought it insufficient.
Sneak preview for chapter two: Nick hacks into Jane's computer and finds all of her recorded sexual escapades. Highlights thus far include a "gay" French stud, the professor of a class they shared (Nick's first B, which was alluded to in this chapter), and a five man gangbang...I have more ideas, but I think it better to save them until they are more fully formed. Suffice it to say, however, there will be a great deal more action going forward.
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Anonymous10/18/12
Great start
and a good place to end the first chapter. Don't leave this one unfinished.
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THE MAJOR MISTAKE
would be a long range plan with those 2. TK U MLJ LV NV
The biggest mistake would be waiting for this to unfold for days on end....
...story's with chapters should at least strive for more than a page. liked it but is it worth waiting?
Well, he found her out before any wedding
At least he's gonna dodge THAT bullet! Time to move on, dude.
kick her ass to the curb
you can also tell your sister to go fuck herself cause she cant be trusted to keep her mouth shut.
Good riddance to sluts like that.
Notes
First off, the mistake was not made by Nick, nor has it made it into the plot yet. This and the next two chapters (unless I decide to combine them, which I might) are separated from the rest of the story by a significant leap in time.
Also, this is the first erotic story I've ever submitted so I didn't have a clue how many pages it would be on here, but it was four on my word processor. I'm not sure how I'm supposed to dictate where I foresee the chapters ending, but I ended this one where I thought it best to end. My apologies if you thought it insufficient.
Sneak preview for chapter two: Nick hacks into Jane's computer and finds all of her recorded sexual escapades. Highlights thus far include a "gay" French stud, the professor of a class they shared (Nick's first B, which was alluded to in this chapter), and a five man gangbang...I have more ideas, but I think it better to save them until they are more fully formed. Suffice it to say, however, there will be a great deal more action going forward.
Great start
and a good place to end the first chapter. Don't leave this one unfinished.
COLLEGE ROMANCES....AT BEST ARE FICKLE
but when there is skull-duggery in the back ground, little hope is forecast, TK U MLJ LV NV
Damn
Seems to be not the woman you want to spend you life with. Let's see what our hero has up his sleeve. I'll continue...
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