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5 stars
great follow up :)
more more more
loving the story , cant wait for more ...
Hot Hot Hot
This story gets better and better. Another 5 out of Five.
More ... please! ~ L
Great start
I can't help but think you are laying a foundation for many more stories with these characters. lol...Or is that more of my hope? Great read so far, loving the way it's developing and looking forward to much more! Thanks!
Hot
Yea babe , that was hott. More please
Definitely keep writing....I love the relationship between amy and Sam and would love to know what happens next.
Loved that!
Absolutely beautiful!
I'm a lesbian and have been looking t this site for ages, iys great. Your writing is so realistic!
I've enjoyed the first 2 stories and would love to read more about Amy and Sam. Keep it coming!
please write more
I only wish there were more chapters to this sexy, fabulous story!
Brilliant!
Needs work.
Basicly very good but I think it would be better as a chapter of a longer work. Also, I would suggest you try reading your writing out loud and listening to the way the words go together. At times they seem a bit 'choppy'.
Make you stories a bit longer. The whole scene seems to be a bit of 'slam-bam let's fuck. A little more of their interactions leading up to the climax might be better to help us to understand the characters better.
BUT, other than my nit picking, you have talent and need to treat us to more of your writing. Go for it!!!!
MedAccInc
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