All Comments on 'We Need to Stop This Ch. 04'

Mmmmmmmmmm keep it coming, so to speak. As usual you never fail to arouse.I can't wait to read the next one.

Your stories never fail to get a "reaction" out of me!

Once again, well done. A nice playful quality to this chapter with a cool contrast between the twins' mischievous nature and Jake's hesitant yet eager demeanor. I like your storytelling style. You set a mood, embellish the narrative with credible dialog, involve my senses with elegant descriptions -- and then before long, my penis is involved in the experience as well! Keep this one going, please. It's fun and damn sexy.

I guess it may be a good thing for future stories, but I see nothing but flaws in this.

It was terribly fun to write, though. I made up a list of questions and a list of dares, and then tried matching them up with the characters in different ways.

I think it suffers from being in the third person, but of course Jake's mother is the narrator, so we have to wait for the climax, pun somewhat intended, to get back inside her, pun not unintended.

Do stay tuned :)

B

Dear Brandie69, Who is Brad? I got stopped cold when You used the name. I thought that his name was Jake! Other than that I enjoyed the story. Please write more of their story. Is Brad who the character Jake is modeled after?

Several readers have caught this mistake. Let me tell you about it.

I interrupted the writing of this chapter (you'll notice the long passage of time between Ch. 3 and Ch. 4) to write a Halloween contest entry. For some strange reason, when I started back into it, "Jake" became "Brad." I thought I had gone back through and fixed all of them, but it appears that I missed one.

By the time you read this, I hope that I will have worked through the process of fixing it.

B

The more chapters I read the better it gets. I'm really enjoying how the characters are slowly being revealed to each other and the reader. This latest chapter was sooooo erotic and a huge tease. I was wondering if they'd all make out in the end but you ended it with style :)

Looking forward to chapter 5!!

5***** piece. Really enjoyable.

I do appreciate hearing from other authors. There is at least one more chapter in this story's future, so stay tuned :)

And I notice that, although I thought I had submitted an edit, the one "name" mistake still seems to be here. I'm going to have to try that again.

B

And he's still one lucky dude!

That was erotic, and I'm going to say *why* it was erotic, because I'm interested in know what makes things erotic for my own writing.

It was erotic because I could imagine being in that situation, being in a hot tub, doing "truth or dare", knowing perhaps a little more than I should, and having the questions, and the dares, ramp up as the evening wore on. "The evening wore on." That's a very nice expression isn't it? With your permission I'll say it again. "The evening wore on."

Anyway, enough rabbit references. I'm looking forwards to the next chapter.

great work Brandie you sure have turned into the queen of hot series

Thank you for prodding me into finishing the climactic final chapter of this. It has been wearing on me, but I think you've given me just the poke I need.

And thank you, kaidman!

B

No overt sex in the series. Okay, some handjobs & one hummer, but nothing like most t/t stories. Are there more stories yet to come? (fingers crossed)

Who are you trying to kid?

First the Mother spread her legs for her son while naked twice. Then her naked son approached his Mother in between her legs with a hard on both times. True you ended both scenes like that but come on; a blind man could tell what they did.

The sisters who pleasured each other in the 2cd chapter threw me for a loop. There was no mention who they were until the 4th chapter.

What I am trying to say my friend is that you are one hell of a story teller. I love this story and cant what for the final climax ... er ... chapter (red faced).

Thanks,

John

You truly made me smile just now. :)

I do mean to finish this series, but I need for the final chapter to be at least somewhat realistic and the inspiration for how to do that hasn't hit me yet.

But thanks again!

B

I thoroughly enjoyed all 4 stories, despite the lack of flagrant lustcapades between the characters, such as what is common in most stories. Few folks manage to do well with teasing the readers, but you had my erection on edge nearly the whole time. And, I actually liked it. ;-)

I look forward to the next installment.

- D.S.

You are very kind :)

B

An inspiring story in 4 chapters. Each building up to a happy ending, which i indeed experienced. Thnx Brandy

Paul

Are you going to write more???

What happened to Double or Nothing?

Where is the NEW sibling story?? Why have you gone?

In my first year of writing, I think I've discovered that my muse prefers warm weather and avoids February entirely.

I truly think that the stories I've posted so far have run their course, for the most part, so I haven't spent much time with additional chapters for those characters.

The one I'm working on the most actively right now is much longer and more ambitious than anything I've yet posted. I do miss turning out a nice number of the fun shorter pieces, but I've decided to give myself until the crocuses bloom to warm my blood again.

But I will.

B (Brrrrrr)

the dialog and action flows comfortably from one person to the next, which isn't easy. The sweetness and good humor of the characters and their fun loving interaction draws me in. Well done! Thanks :-)

Beautiful story. I liked the way the author wove the stories together.