All Comments on 'Quan Found his Daddy in Frisco.'

necessitates many a read. lingers & sticks.

deserted him ,left him to rot in an orphanage & fled to 'States ; the protagonist hunts him down & the bounder gets his comeuppance ?!! Poetry of Vengeance ---wow ! very good plot'n poem GM !

seems flawless, you want a fan rave, you got it

I stared at him like the katydid did

I saw on Willow Street, eyes on an aphid,

this little bump stands out, it seems strange that it seems the perfect touch

i don't quite know how to put this is words, but the dynamics act like a wave, very nicely breaking up what just could have been a linear story, very subtle, any way this is one of those bastards that warrant further study. You been reading Frost again?

But I will ask about the last line, because I'm stumped. What is Nam Ha' ? I thought it was a physical area, but it must have another meaning I am missing here.

Nam Ha` refers to Quan's mother. I do not speak Vietnamese, and there's always a risk in relying on one website as I did here for a female first name that has 2 syllables and a distinct punctuation mark as I have seen in other words associated with that language.

...despite the rap meter.

pithy, and yet another slice from life's past-its-sell-by pie. glad not to have missed this gritty rendering.

against a race instead of a human, TK U MLJ LV NV

crafted.

with so many twists and turns, you keep the reader wondering where it's going next right down to the last line. I'd need to read it a few more times to get all the nuance, the layers of meaning and get used to some of the sonic tricks you are trying out. But. Just really good, too good to languish here. Please submit it to a poetry journal!