A Ruined Life Ch. 01

Good Story****

This is such a great read. I am hoping you continue to submit your writings here. Thanks for sharing.

maybe a 2nd chapter

hope you write a 2nd chapter. would really be nice to see his life play out with Sandy. would like to see his dad realise that Dennis is a real man.

A very beautiful love story

A sweet story and I enjoyed the read, along with the happy ending.

Well done !

Thanks for the good read...

Cute Story

A great story. I love the innosence of the characters Sandy, and Denis.
Cute ending. He has matured more than his entire family, except maybe his mother.

ALL THE SINS OF ANY FAMILY if they are sins

dont always fall down to the youngest, TK U MLJ LV NV

Nice story but

In reality, the mother was just as bad a parent as the father. She forced him to live the life she wanted him to live instead of letting him make his own choices just like his father would have.

Lets be perfectly honest here. 95% of men in this situation would have either said no and thrown a fit or ended up resenting their mother for the rest of their life. Not to mention the douchebag father and brothers. Thank the lord I didn't grow up with a family like this. Pretty shitty people actually. Good writing but these people are shitty!

beautiful

I loved it. thank you.
it was sew good I was willing to look passed the spelling errors. wink wink

I understand what the mother was trying to do wich was brilliant, but I think her son could have been a bit more rebelious at the start at least. I also think the job at the hairdressers was too much. And because I think your story idea was very good your writing talent brilliant, is the reason I'm saying all the above, or I wouldn't loose my time writing this or some of the rest of us I guess. Of course I think your spelling is perfect since english isn't my first language :)
thanks for writing

Anxiously hoping

I am anxiously hoping for a few more chapters where the guy can show that he can be successful as a guy who isn't all about football. Where the dad is proud of him.

It would've been nice if his mom asked him if he wanted to do all the things she made him do. Granted most of the things he learned will help him in his future but she didn't take into account that his peers would bully him for it or how he would feel. I wish Denis would've rebelled some but I guess that wasn't the point of the story.

Great story

Me I don't worry much about spelling and such...yea doing it up proper is good, but we're a bunch of talented amateurs, telling short stories. I thought this story a very good read, with a nice plot, and generally plausible. I'm working through the rest, with pleasure.

Chilley

excellent very romantic

Thank you

I enjoyed reading your story. Thankyou for sharing it with us.

as for the spoken word

MsT, don't let the dribblers of Academic English get to you. Be forced to attend any Higher Education English Department get together and you will discover the reason it's called 'Higher'.

Is that the Deans, Doctorates, Masters, Professors,Instructors nd Assistants are divisible into three groupings.

Drunks, Potheads and Drunken Potheads.

Calling BS

It makes a cute fairy-tale, but lets hope no one buys into the story. Women may not actually want insensitive pricks, but they do want strong and a little dangerous.

Know how to cook, sew and give fashion advice? As a guy you'll be friend zoned 99 times out of a hundred... I speak of what I know. It was only my training in massage that kept me from being a lonely virgin after I turned fifteen.

MOST OF THE BS THAT GOES ON IN HIGH SCHOOL

could be answered with ego and jealousy. TK U MLJ LV NV

Denis

is denice because of denis not his cum slut mom

Bogus

Less than 1 in 1000 women under the age of 35 want a "sensitive guy" for anything except a "true friend." They are programmed to look for men who are at least a little "macho" or even dangerous..

The wise women -- about 1 in 3 == don't actually want a real asshole, but they don't want a "girly man" either. Well dressed ? Sure. Well mannered ? Yup. A ballet-dancer ? Are you joking ? They would admire his talent, and say "God, that man can dance" but when it comes to doing the nasty ? Don't think so.

Which is a damned shame, since I would presume the sensitive guys would make excellent, attentive lovers. But they're not like to ever have a chance to demonstrate it. Women as a group are as genetically programmed as men.

Dear annony knows nothing about what women want! His wife left his sorry ass and took everything that wasn't

nailed down. I gave you a 5

TOO FUNNY

I was NEVER big enough to play most sports, but at 9 years old my mom knew better than to pull the fucking shit this poor wimp went thru!!! This my friends is NOT the way to turn an ok guy into a MAN! little girls may disagree...WHAT A PUSSY WIMP!

Not done??????

Seriously? All lined up for a spectacular finish and you walked away from it????

Come on finish the story!

Loved the story - Hated the title

Great story - I wished I'd written it. It's both funny and romantic. I do wish that the author had done a little more proofreading before submitting it though.

Loved it!

When his brothers have had their second ACL surgery and third divorce he will be be finishing his MFA looking forward to a long, healthy, and happy life.

Those who made obnoxious comments...

And hide behind anonymity are the real pussies!