More plot development other than and in addition to the 45,000 words that preceded this one final chapter?
Without beating the plot and characters to death and making this another 100,000 word story, as I did with my Mom Strips Naked for Nude Day, when readers wrote that there was too much plot development and character development (lol), this story has sufficient plot and character development already.
Perhaps it's time for some of the more verbally bashing readers to write their own story so that I may learn how to write a story from them. Only, when I look at my most verbal bashers, surprisingly, they don't have any stories posted while I already have 113 stories all with plot and character development posted under my SusanJillParker name for 2012.
Go figure. Who knew my most verbal bashers would be my most illiterate? Isn't that always the case. Editors edit because they can't write and writers write because they can't edit. What happened to readers reading because they want to be entertained by a story?
It's frustrating for a writer to want to write here when we write for free, when the few comments we receive are mostly negative bashes, and when most readers don't care enough about the writer to vote. Even when they do vote, afraid we may win a few dollars in a writing contest, they downgrade our stories with their low votes.
Too busy looking to read something to masturbate over, I suggest those readers who are only interested in cumming not read my stories. My stories are more erotic in nature than pornographic. My stories are not so much for the brain you have in your cock but the brain you have in your head.
Nonetheless, I'm not picking on the last commentor as I am all the other readers who routinely bash my stories, especially those whackos from the Loving Wives category who take great pleasure in making bashing comments without so much as reading more than the title of the story. It would be a sad refrain if all we writers stopped writing for you readers. Imagine Literotica having no more stories for you to jerk off over and for you to bash.
What do we writers get out of writing for you? You bash our stories, don't vote for our stories, and act as if you're the great writers on the site when many of you have never written a story and can't even so much as make one grammatically correct bashing comment.
"Ah, I feel better getting that off of my 36 C cup chest."
For those of you who read my stories, thank you. I write for you.
Tell me what you want me to write and I'll write it. Make a comment or send me an e-mail.
Plot development? What the fuck does decadentdessert know about that?
He has yet to post a single story.!
This may not be your best story ever but it's head and shoulders above the average on this site.. So it gets a 5 Star vote with no reservations because you, my dear. are the best writer of erotic and pornographic literature to be found anywhere.
As a fellow writer, I'm well used to negative comments. My only advice is to delete any trash feedback and act like it never happened. Focus on the positives.
For me, you have a wonderful imagination and I loved the premise of your story. You told it from the heart, too. I loved that. I enjoyed reading every single chapter.
Now, you mentioned other story ideas. I have one :) I'd love to see what you'd do with a lesbian/bi story. Okay, I understand that you're straight (shame!) but a good writer can turn her mind to any subject. What d'you think?
Very wonderful and descriptive writing. The ending was unexpected and made the entire reading worthwhile. Continue writing and sharing these wonderful stores.
5* for you Susan! This story changed direction a couple times and the surprise ending was great! They both got what they wanted--each other. I really liked this story.
Susan,
Your writing is wonderful and I LOVED the story. It kept me wanting for every word you write. Keep up the great writing, I look forward to reading more from you.
Dear you have proven that all stories dont need to contain sex like snowfall .It is a great story by for my second fovourite in 4years of browsing literotica hats off to you.It is written with golden
English
Kinda rush to the finish. I mean I am happy that she got her man,but more plot development leading up to the grand finale would have been nice.
Huh? Give me a break.
More plot development other than and in addition to the 45,000 words that preceded this one final chapter?
Without beating the plot and characters to death and making this another 100,000 word story, as I did with my Mom Strips Naked for Nude Day, when readers wrote that there was too much plot development and character development (lol), this story has sufficient plot and character development already.
Perhaps it's time for some of the more verbally bashing readers to write their own story so that I may learn how to write a story from them. Only, when I look at my most verbal bashers, surprisingly, they don't have any stories posted while I already have 113 stories all with plot and character development posted under my SusanJillParker name for 2012.
Go figure. Who knew my most verbal bashers would be my most illiterate? Isn't that always the case. Editors edit because they can't write and writers write because they can't edit. What happened to readers reading because they want to be entertained by a story?
It's frustrating for a writer to want to write here when we write for free, when the few comments we receive are mostly negative bashes, and when most readers don't care enough about the writer to vote. Even when they do vote, afraid we may win a few dollars in a writing contest, they downgrade our stories with their low votes.
Too busy looking to read something to masturbate over, I suggest those readers who are only interested in cumming not read my stories. My stories are more erotic in nature than pornographic. My stories are not so much for the brain you have in your cock but the brain you have in your head.
Nonetheless, I'm not picking on the last commentor as I am all the other readers who routinely bash my stories, especially those whackos from the Loving Wives category who take great pleasure in making bashing comments without so much as reading more than the title of the story. It would be a sad refrain if all we writers stopped writing for you readers. Imagine Literotica having no more stories for you to jerk off over and for you to bash.
What do we writers get out of writing for you? You bash our stories, don't vote for our stories, and act as if you're the great writers on the site when many of you have never written a story and can't even so much as make one grammatically correct bashing comment.
"Ah, I feel better getting that off of my 36 C cup chest."
For those of you who read my stories, thank you. I write for you.
Tell me what you want me to write and I'll write it. Make a comment or send me an e-mail.
SusanJillParker
Thanks
Thanks Susan for another great story, those of us that can't write - read. It always makes my day go better.
You tell 'em Susan
Plot development? What the fuck does decadentdessert know about that?
He has yet to post a single story.!
This may not be your best story ever but it's head and shoulders above the average on this site.. So it gets a 5 Star vote with no reservations because you, my dear. are the best writer of erotic and pornographic literature to be found anywhere.
wonderful imagination
hi Sue :)
As a fellow writer, I'm well used to negative comments. My only advice is to delete any trash feedback and act like it never happened. Focus on the positives.
For me, you have a wonderful imagination and I loved the premise of your story. You told it from the heart, too. I loved that. I enjoyed reading every single chapter.
Now, you mentioned other story ideas. I have one :) I'd love to see what you'd do with a lesbian/bi story. Okay, I understand that you're straight (shame!) but a good writer can turn her mind to any subject. What d'you think?
another great story as always your stories always leaves me wanting more from you.
keep up the good work and cant wait for your next one.
Super Ending
The surprise ending in this story makes it one of the best that I have ever read.
Nice writing
Very wonderful and descriptive writing. The ending was unexpected and made the entire reading worthwhile. Continue writing and sharing these wonderful stores.
Very Interesting
5* for you Susan! This story changed direction a couple times and the surprise ending was great! They both got what they wanted--each other. I really liked this story.
Outstanding as Usual
Susan,
Your writing is wonderful and I LOVED the story. It kept me wanting for every word you write. Keep up the great writing, I look forward to reading more from you.
story worth a grammy or oscar
Dear you have proven that all stories dont need to contain sex like snowfall .It is a great story by for my second fovourite in 4years of browsing literotica hats off to you.It is written with golden
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