All Comments on 'Carried Away'

Powerful writing.

A very sad story, powerfully written.

The writing strongly reminded me of some of Ernest Hemingway’s short stories: the word choice, the sentence structure, the compactness of the writing, the dispassionateness of the narrator. I sensed a slight feeling under the surface that no one was quite in control of their lives—they were just along for the ride. Interesting.

Barry

Very compact and powerful, you should get back to writing here.

When I was stationed at Fort Hood Texas I left off the base that was a couple lived in the apartment next to me and I could hear her screaming for him to stop after a while it got quiet so I went to bed the next morning as I was getting ready to go back to the base the husband comes out of the house looks at me gets in his car and leaves his wife looks out the window and she sees her husband leave she looks at me and waved and when she did her nightgown opened up I could see her large beautiful titties and a very hairy pussy she did not try and cover and then she turned that night when I got done leaving the base I say the neighbor his car had broke down I called a buddy of mine and he old me a favor so he came over and I watched as my friend gave that guy a good beating and when he got home he went straight to bed there was no screaming or yelling I think you got the message

Well, Anonymous of Fort Hood Texas,

you win this month's punctuation and grammar avoidance award.

Congratulations, good work!