real shit and now is just shit.
I appreciate the honest opinion. A little more detail would be appreciated though - plot, characterisation, sentence structure, too fantastic, too realistic, what exactly was it that you thought needed work?
Like practically every chapter, this one has amazing dynamic changes in mood, speed, tone, drifting from a comfortably recognizable place (albeit one with group sex, as is the norm here!) to edge, frustration, release, and now a precipice of suspense.
The telescoped time-change in the finale, with Sean and Penny drifting into something like idyllic normality, and then plunging back into the world of Tara-dom, with the cliffhanger conclusion (oh goodness, what will we find!) is intense, teasing, and somehow saddening, even if, technically at least, the ending promises a recourse to the familiar status quo for them. Without being heavyhanded, this entry touches on enough themes of longterm relationship stability (or lack thereof) to hearken to the darker potentials in their group's pursuit of limitless sensual possibility
The cliffhanger is resolved - next chapter is up. Thanks again for the comments, although only two comments is disappointing. As for the voting - is there a trend on Lit these days for no one to vote except trolls? Every story I have put up in the last year has started out with multiple votes of '1' and an average of 3 or below. Then, after they go off being in the new stories section, the score creeps up, until it hits 4 and above, as most votes are '5' or '4'. It is an interesting phenomenon.
I love this chapter ....the final realisation that had he not gone down Taras destructive path he may have been happy with Penny .....ok possibly she would have been too submissive in the end but its interesting that he finally reconsidered marriage after they stopped the games .I am enjoying Sean's peeks of self awareness .
"It doesn't matter what you do". But it nearly did. The themes evolving in the last chapter are explored further here and it is to the authors credit that, in this chapter based tale, there is no sense of a disjoint between each addition. Obviously when it is first uploaded the early readers are put off by the long and thoughtful passages between the sex and give disappointing ratings. Anyone reading the whole epic can only be impressed with the psychological truths that underpin the sensational sex.
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