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Exciting stuff. You capitalization was a bit distracting, but a good story. :)
That was a bit of light hearted fun. Would be interesting to see if you can continue with the storyline.
Fun, engaging and sexy. You may want to have a proofreader go over it in the future since I saw a handful of typos, but not enough to distract from the overall affect. I do feel sorry for the guy...not the jerk that fell asleep but the vampire.
Hi... I've just discovered you and your story. Why oh why don't you write more?
Okay, as a fellow writer I know how long it can take to produce a really good story, but you have such a wonderful 'first person' style that adds so much value to the story itself. The reader gets inside 'your' head. I love that.
More please... much more...
Normally I spot any typos etc - but I was so caught up in this that I didn't notice any. It was really good, really believeable, and now I'm going to have to look for more of your stories. Thank you - I loved it.
Warm wonderful story. Would be interesting to see where you might take it. You have a great way with words.
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