All Comments on 'Mary'

Hi! You have a good plot, & write well, but needs at least twice as much detail, esp. re the sex parts!

Please try more, ypu have great potential!

This wasn't your typical stroke story. It was more of a love story. A man to be pitied rises above the poor me's and becomes what he was all along: a Man. A Good Man. A father and a husband.

He had been a husband for so long, he'd forgotten how to be anything else. But he climbed back up onto Life's "little wagon" and will now raise up a new life, redeeming a poor, homeless girl-child, who's only fault was bad taste in boyfriends. And this man, an older and wiser head will raise mother and son to be better than what they would have been, had He not been there, for them.

Fate can be a bitch, but every so often the Hand of God can reach through and provide us all with It's mighty and healing Touch.

no fussing...to the point and very easy to happen...enjoyed your writing...