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CAREFUL WHERE YOU STEP
there may be a cave-in near by. TK U MLJ LV NV
ok
would be better without the words broken, except possibly here
arrested pur suit and per pen
be curious as to the reason for the broken words
good line, rich in r, int rhyme speeds it along, till it hits parade, where you want the slow down
mind ran behind running creatures parade
who said theater's dead?
i would have punctuated, and ends well without the gimmick, just my opin
5ed, although the 4 was tempting
Nice breakin' up of
Amazement ! Amazin ' device /ploy left me abs. Amazed !!
What
a fucking
Self-impor
tant
Piece of shite from
a po
et
Who loves to write
CRAP AND PUNCTUA
ate weirdlee and the
n
Criticize those who write Villanelles
Because they have
No idea what the
fuck they
mean.
sadly
there was once a time when experimentation with ones poetry and poetic style was welcome here. I gave it a five just for being what I feel was a well thought out work. Just because it is different doesn't mean it is bad or the poet doesn't know what they mean. Every poetic style is open for interpretation, even styles that someone doesn't like. I detest end-rhyming poetry. I have read junk written as a sonnet ( i.e.) that was awful just to force it to fit a certain meter. Keep up the good work, ignore those who choose to denigrate and bully.
It seems to me, since it makes a reference to theater, maybe that was the intent when the words were broken up. I have read other work similar and I call them anonymous metaphors. Makes sense to me :)
~NJ
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