Daddy's Lil Whore

THE MAIN WORRY HERE ABOUT HER V

is the VD and STDs. TK U MLJ LV NV

This story ...

First off I love Father and Daughter incest. But this story is rushed with not a lot of details and story back story and build up. Don't get me wrong there are good stories that have the same elements but are fulled with details and have more body to them even though their short stories. This isn't one of them. In my opinion you should work on it more and better your spelling.

ugh

Well, that was 5 minutes of my life I'll never get back.

Ugh

is right. I agree with the first 3 comments....
Just... Uuummm... No! Not good at all.

Complete waste of time

Wow, has to be one of the worst I have read!!! Quit writing in such a hurry. Proofread, write with substance, and take your time!!

English.

Desparately needs an editor.

hmmm

Hate to be a nay sayer but get an editor to look at it next time. You mixed sexes in the same sentence, subject cant be a he and she at the same time. Just take your time. You have the right idea, get Daddy and Daughter to having some hot fun. Dont rush your story or their sex it will all get better for the story, your writting and their sexual story.

horrible.

Please

Shoot yourself. Your writing sucks.

you seem like a teenager writing

very unknowing..no realism..pls come back and try again when you are older. poor writing, poor vocabulary and totally lacking in all respects. i normally try to be constructive but this is rubbish

nickinoo

i recall taking my daughters virginity mmmmmm is all she kept saying.....

its okay

it is nice story just dont take negative remarks to your heart.... keep writing and you will improve...

I see the negative comments...

Honestly this wasn't a great story. Easy to improve, a grammar/spelling editor and maybe a little plot adjusting. I feel like it ended a little too quickly but fix a couple things and this could be a great story. Ignore those other comments and just work on your writing. All those amazing stories come from people with a lot of experience. Keep working and you'll get better