Softball Revenge

Man...what is it lately...

So many half-assed stories writen with about as much thought behind them as it takes to clip your toe nails. If you're not going to put any effort in writing then why do it at all.

Funny***

Read??

Huh???

What?
Very different I must say.
Write a ch. 2 and put it in BDSM. There's where your strength lies.

Maybe

SOME PEOPLE CANT TAKE

a no or a yes has a final answer. TK U MLJ LV NV

I thought it might be your first story

which would have explained it - but it wasn't. Poorly thought out and not very well written, with characters a computer could have devised. I don't think you're likely to get much appreciation in this section.

no

no just plain silly.

where was the punishment

the dude get busted in the head abd a divorce, weak and willing

I agree, silly.

He'll

I liked it - even the kneeling wife was funny. Kissing the bat - lol. 5

I liked the twist.

Superb!

I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. After reading lot of cuck stories it was so good to see a real man take charge. Keep up the good work.

Not bad, but coulda been a lot better

First, except perhaps for the Bull's impressive overall size and appearance, there is no rationale for Sweetie's liaison, especially for an extended affair after admitting the sex was not very good! Hard to believe Hubby would not ask about that when Sweetie was kneeling contritely. Sweetie's continued guilt would normally be unusual, if we (the readers) knew her better.
Overall, this is about a 3* story with good potential to be done better! (I hit a different score by finger-slip!)

Yeah I accidently hit the 1* too.

Kneeling? Funny? Well thought out. But you're just being nasty. If you want to write a serious story I'll read it.

A bit on the strange side

Not too realistic, especially with the wife kneeling down, and not fucking over him in a divorce even though she was fucking around on him.

Adultery isn't a crime in most states, but assault is...

Different, could have been longer!

I found your story to be a refreshing change from the preponderance of wimp and cuck stories that have been plaguing this site lately.

Pure Fantasy

Contrite wife, okay, sometimes they are. But this wife is pure fantasy. I guess you told the story of how men would like the story to end.

garbage

what a pathetic story

It was ok

Until you got to the end. Did not flow right but loved the oh oh oh and the baseball bat part.

Two chances, both failed

Men with no true soul. That kind of weakness shows support for the failure of Obama .

It was good right up to

The wife's reaction. Totally unbelievable and unrealistic; at least in my mind.

I did like the supposedly mistaken Oh Oh Oh for No No No. Nice touch.
Keep working at writing; we'll be interested to see what you come up with. Thanks for the hard work.

Woodmanone

So? What? She is a closet Sub???

The behavior was way to typical of a trained sub to be coincidental?

However - the surrounding story line worked as did the essential nature of her recognizing her mistakes -

A person can recognize their mistakes and try to remedy their actions.

I think Sally did exactly the right thing after being caught the way she was, possibly went overboard a little. A very entertaining story and that is why I read. Thank you for writing. I know it's a story but I thought the author made the husband a shrewd man with the baseball bat etc. A great touch.

The only way this shit could even

be halfway believable were if you had mentioned that she was mentally ill before you caught her fucking around. All that other shit was wasted motor skills of your hands and mind......HALF MIND!!!

Good story.

The bit about kneeling and asking to be whipped was a bit unbelievable, but overall a good original story.

What??????

This is one of the worst fucking story I've read on this site....

Kind of funny

To watch the BTB crowd. Her contrition kind of made their usual stone, burn, disembowel, draw-and-quarter, behead etc--the bitch superfluous. After all, when she lays down and begs to be whipped and starts behaving like a water-boarded cur dog, it just takes the fun out of it. What's left to do? Maybe feed her into a wood-chipper?

Not much tension or conflict. Like all men, he's a blameless saint and, like all women, she's a scum-sucking sinner with no redeeming qualities. From the beginning, everybody sides with him and everybody agrees she should be burned at the stake.

Hardly a twitch in Harry's Peter-Meter on this one.

wtf

WTF did I just read. This was like she gets caught then turns into some mindless sub shit. Fail just fail

Weird

The author made 'Sally' sounds as nutty as a fruit bar. Her elevator has never made it to the top floor. She's a sandwich short of a picnic basket.

And to the previous anony-mouse, if a man works his ass off for a woman while she is home screwing another man IN THEIR BED, then yes, she is a frickin' nasty ho-bag slug and he IS a frickin' Saint. I read the story to my wife after reading your response and then your response to it. Her reply afterward was that you probably aren't anything but a man-hating ho-bag yourself.

sure

The woodchopper is a good idea. God forbid those genes ever found their way to more children.

Ya'll got it wrong

Dave just fucked her brains out. That is why she became a dip shit. ROFLMAO when I think about it that way. A lot of women on here are described as getting their brains fucked out so maybe she really did.

Kind of a strange story

I understand her cheating and his plan. But I don't get Sally's sudden subservience and her desire to be beaten. What was that all about? Maybe you needed more background information or something in the story to explain her behavior. In the end, it made the whole story seem strange.

Stupid

Really dumb. The story was ok up top the lying down to be whipped and no cop is ever going to make a comment or take the time to see if it is ok.

Better his wife...

Better his wife become crazy and go to an asylum, than all that clown act...

Strange

This is an odd little story.
George in Omaha

Very stilted storytelling

And a couple of big questions. After beating Dave with the bat why was he so mixed up? He obviously planned the whole thing. He spied on his wife to catch her cheating. He bought the bat to do exactly what he did. The glove and ball were just diversions. And why did his wife suddenly go all submissive on him? That made no sense. There wasn't enough background in the story for those actions. And Jane just moves in with them? Why would she do that? She's never met him before right? Another unexplained occurrence. How did the kids feel about Jane moving in? Did he ever divorce Sally? Too many holes in this story to make it a good read.

If I see one more reference

to "cleaning out" or "taking to the cleaners" I will go ape-shit. Look up divorce laws.

Exactly what I Would Have Done

Well...except I would have bashed his skull in. A dead home invader can't testify against me. Worthy of my 5-star rating.