Doctor Dee is Dead

Wonderful, creepy, gothic horror in the best sense. And it was hot. Great job!

Oh My

Weird, scary and perfect for the category. Good job, Og!!!

Inventive

Wonderfully inventive concept but the sex seemed rushed. Veers between past tense narrative and presence tense journal entry style a little clumsily in places.

incredibly rushed.

virtually no detail and complex issues introduced and thrown out with no exploration. Reads like it should have a bunch of "oh by the way"s scattered through it. This is not a good thing. I'm sounding harsh and I apologise but the potential here is excellent and the writing is good. Just slow down, take us on more of a journey.

Has lots of potential

If you had taken this same story and spread it over two or probably three chapters, padding things out a lot more so that that 'we' the reader can construct a back story you would have something which would be a serious contender for 'story of the month' award.
Please don't stop writing, you show that you have real talent by tackling such a complex topic.