One could give this the script treatment & pass it down to Jim Carrey. He's hit a slow patch ...as apparantlly this author has. No virulence in this review, Britease has done many other works of the first rank . This just isn't one of them.
because you're normally one the best writer anywhere on Literotica, but this seems like writing for the sake of writing - almost like an exercise. I couldn't supply my own ending because it simply didn't engage enough for me to care.
Still well-written, of course, so 3* for that.
This is a common theme in many stories but you take it up a notch. The cheating cunt didn't expect the divorce option and of course in her warped mind she was justifying her cheating by having her friend seduce him so she can get revenge.
Now he fucks the wife and her friend until he files for divorce.
I know this is fiction but I don't get why people go to such extremes to justify their cheating. I guess I never will.
Great tale. Ignore the naysayers.
seem to have passed to the bright side for good. A well written comedy, and a new permutation of the "we have to talk" theme. However, I am missing your darker, more emotional stories. If this is due to your life being all fair and jolly, more power to you, but you can't blame me for doing so.
Hmm, I was good until it indicated he is just stringing her along. I understand that trust would be lost, but where she hadn't actually physically done anything, to do BOTH, string her along and divorce her, is way over the top and becomes cruelty for the sake of cruelty, and not justice.
I like your stories like I liked the stories of denham forrest aka the wanderer. It's sad that his disease disabled him from writing enjoyable stories. But there is some comfort when I read yours.
Biggest quibble: Sweetie is bold enough to believe she can successfully conspire with her GF to provide cover for Sweetie Adventures! A woman THAT bold should be bold enough to arrange (in passing in the hall at work) a tryst with a co-worker! Such a hall chat is much less likely to be compromised than a phone call to GF on her house phone! Therefore, it's hard to believe that Sweetie and her Bull-of-Choice did not ALREADY have enough 'flings' to finish a full game of Frisbee-Golf!
5*
@CIKARN - Hubby only suggested the 50-50 split was MISLEADING. If Sweetie sincerely dedicated herself, Hubby might figure out that her contribution to his sex-life was 'too big to fail!' MOST Important - Sweetie DID carry through the first stage of her conspiracy when her friend seduced her Hubby. Don't know about YOUR sense of 'acceptable,' but I consider Sweetie's cold-blooded plan, which also drags her friend into interfering in their marriage, to be a MUCH deeper betrayal than if Sweetie were to succumb during a hot moment with Tom-Bull!
As usual, a well written, charming, witty and amusing story. That won't prevent the TTB crowd from complaining, but they miss the point: in the Brit's stories, the husband is usually ahead of the scheming wife, which allows him to control the situation, or, at least, he catches on right quickly and turns things to his advantage. And that is a satisfying (if perhaps unrealistic! lol) outcome!
without the morals or brains to treat each other with love and respect.
Too bad really. They will most likely continue to abuse each other until the divorce becomes them.
I know, I know, it's a trash, I mean a flash story.
You're either too lazy, or lack the talent to finish. I'm going to assume lazy, since most of your other stories are great, or at least good.
But ALL of your other stories are finished!
I would like to say that you have definitely restored my faith in Brittan not being an island of cucks and wimps.
However unfinished stories only gets you a three.
Chapter two will probably get you a five, even if he decides to keep the slut.
Okay, Okay, keeping the slut would prolly only get you a four.
Another author suffering from the "Failure to finish" disease that afflicts so many writers on this site. We did not read your story to write our own ending to your story. We would like a finished story, COMPLETE with an ending. That way we can complain about your choice of endings and tell you how it SHOULD have ended. Another Brit sunk in the muck. BAH!
Brit Tease don't you know we American chaps like our stories filled with comments about all the electronic surveillance shit we need to get to make the DVDs and all the glossy 81/2 by 11 pictures. And where was all the 'Oh my, Oh gosh, how could she, why didn't I see it earlier, My life is ruined, Oh now I remember how sloppy her cunt was, and the hickeys I inadvertently noticed on her neck. Heck I need a plan, Boy am I pissed, I can't wait till I get to use my Karate, no my Navy seal, no my Airborne combat training and beat the shit out of the other guy. Of course I know in my heart the other guy won't press charges because he's married and doesn't want to fuck up his poopy home. Tell me Brit Tease when were you going to tell us about how he had to take a short vacation to his cabin by the lake; remember the one his grandfather built back before the Civil War. And shit the guy never even went to the tavern, I mean pub, and got drunk as shit only to be picked up by some whore with a heart of gold who would give him the best blow job of his life. Come on Brit Tease you know us American guys aren't like you; we have standards!
Brit I find your wit so funny. I equate it to John Cleese (especially the parrot skit). I love all of your short or "flash" stories. And I do not understand why so many people need to be spoon fed an ending. What no mind of your own? Carvohi's comment was bang on. Please sir, may I have some more soup? Thank you Jim
Brit, I enjoy the fact that you allow the reader to decide how they would end the story, but it often leaves a sour taste in my mouth because I am curious to see how you, as the author, would have ended it.... Its your darling so while I am ok with reaching my own conclusions, I would much rather see how you would end things since you are the one who created these characters.
Bri-tease gives you a revenge short, and nothing but a revenge short, and you have to ask which way a probability of reconciliation slants?
He has:
Just fucked her best friend
Just got her to out herself and her lover, to get him fired and divorced.
Set up a threesome with the other woman.
And you have to ask his attitude to staying with the woman? There is nothing in the story to suggest they stay together, other than an appreciation of her tits. Which he seems to appreciate better on the other woman.
Just sayin'.
(the italicized comment at the end was... teasing.)
English
Short And Funny***
Thanks for the read a couple more like this would be nice.
Mediocre Sit-Com Fodder
One could give this the script treatment & pass it down to Jim Carrey. He's hit a slow patch ...as apparantlly this author has. No virulence in this review, Britease has done many other works of the first rank . This just isn't one of them.
Hate to say this
because you're normally one the best writer anywhere on Literotica, but this seems like writing for the sake of writing - almost like an exercise. I couldn't supply my own ending because it simply didn't engage enough for me to care.
Still well-written, of course, so 3* for that.
I Get IT
This is a common theme in many stories but you take it up a notch. The cheating cunt didn't expect the divorce option and of course in her warped mind she was justifying her cheating by having her friend seduce him so she can get revenge.
Now he fucks the wife and her friend until he files for divorce.
I know this is fiction but I don't get why people go to such extremes to justify their cheating. I guess I never will.
Great tale. Ignore the naysayers.
Nicely written
brevity saved the story - kudos
Thanks
Thanks for the entertainment. I have missed your stories, been having to reread, which is all ways a good time. Mike from Texas.
You
seem to have passed to the bright side for good. A well written comedy, and a new permutation of the "we have to talk" theme. However, I am missing your darker, more emotional stories. If this is due to your life being all fair and jolly, more power to you, but you can't blame me for doing so.
Fine Flash Story
Sounds almost like HDK.... Sorry, Sorry he is on the other side of the pond.
Nicely played shot...
Yes
Welcome back. Snappy story. 5
Trust
Hmm, I was good until it indicated he is just stringing her along. I understand that trust would be lost, but where she hadn't actually physically done anything, to do BOTH, string her along and divorce her, is way over the top and becomes cruelty for the sake of cruelty, and not justice.
Good story.
Ha, Ha, Ha....
Good flash story. I like humor.
Good stories are seldom
I like your stories like I liked the stories of denham forrest aka the wanderer. It's sad that his disease disabled him from writing enjoyable stories. But there is some comfort when I read yours.
Sounds
Like Linda might get a bit more then the Occassional . Not to Mention most wives don't realise hubbys check out their friends and think Hmmmmm Maybe.
VERY CUTE
a double turn-about on a before and after. TK U MLJ LV NV
Hilarious
Biggest quibble: Sweetie is bold enough to believe she can successfully conspire with her GF to provide cover for Sweetie Adventures! A woman THAT bold should be bold enough to arrange (in passing in the hall at work) a tryst with a co-worker! Such a hall chat is much less likely to be compromised than a phone call to GF on her house phone! Therefore, it's hard to believe that Sweetie and her Bull-of-Choice did not ALREADY have enough 'flings' to finish a full game of Frisbee-Golf!
5*
@CIKARN - Hubby only suggested the 50-50 split was MISLEADING. If Sweetie sincerely dedicated herself, Hubby might figure out that her contribution to his sex-life was 'too big to fail!' MOST Important - Sweetie DID carry through the first stage of her conspiracy when her friend seduced her Hubby. Don't know about YOUR sense of 'acceptable,' but I consider Sweetie's cold-blooded plan, which also drags her friend into interfering in their marriage, to be a MUCH deeper betrayal than if Sweetie were to succumb during a hot moment with Tom-Bull!
Ah, the Brit strikes again!
As usual, a well written, charming, witty and amusing story. That won't prevent the TTB crowd from complaining, but they miss the point: in the Brit's stories, the husband is usually ahead of the scheming wife, which allows him to control the situation, or, at least, he catches on right quickly and turns things to his advantage. And that is a satisfying (if perhaps unrealistic! lol) outcome!
What a Great Drive-By Story
How do you keep your stories so fresh and entertaining? It's that English Ale isn't it! Eh! Our Canadian Beer is a very close second
Entertaining!
Short and sweet.......nicely done. Well worth the few minutes of time. Especially given the smile on my face upon completion.
Thank you for sharing your stories with us.
A fine example of two married people...
without the morals or brains to treat each other with love and respect.
Too bad really. They will most likely continue to abuse each other until the divorce becomes them.
Great fun
A short and sweet afternoon pick-me-up, and a nice twist as usual.
Good Shorty
Except the humor could have been sharper longer if the wife hadn't capitulated so easily and so quickly.
A good story but a fantasy
In real life the guy would have his balls cut off and jammed up his ass if he tried anything like this
Colin would be crazy to get rid of her
Cloe is dumb but beautiful and has a gorgeous biddable friend? Hell yeah, keep her.
Great Beginning
I know, I know, it's a trash, I mean a flash story.
You're either too lazy, or lack the talent to finish. I'm going to assume lazy, since most of your other stories are great, or at least good.
But ALL of your other stories are finished!
I would like to say that you have definitely restored my faith in Brittan not being an island of cucks and wimps.
However unfinished stories only gets you a three.
Chapter two will probably get you a five, even if he decides to keep the slut.
Okay, Okay, keeping the slut would prolly only get you a four.
Excellent plan
Have her ruin Tom's life, have a month or two of threesomes with Cloe and Linda, then then divorce her ass and run away with Linda.
Damn SilverWolf78754 you took the words right out of my mouth
I also add have him switch all the assets to off shore accounts for protection. Then make sure everything else is worthless.
Second Comment
That's what you call sweet. Fucking cunt fucked herself. Fuck her.
HA HA HA
:-)
5
#2 HEY>>>>>FORE>>>>>>DUCK>>>>>>
or be able to think fast. TK U MLJ LV NV
DUMB ASS!
Another author suffering from the "Failure to finish" disease that afflicts so many writers on this site. We did not read your story to write our own ending to your story. We would like a finished story, COMPLETE with an ending. That way we can complain about your choice of endings and tell you how it SHOULD have ended. Another Brit sunk in the muck. BAH!
Thank you overfalls
Another stupid yank without enough intelligence or imagination to think for himself. (Not like most of you nice american chaps of course!)
Holy Cow!
Brit Tease don't you know we American chaps like our stories filled with comments about all the electronic surveillance shit we need to get to make the DVDs and all the glossy 81/2 by 11 pictures. And where was all the 'Oh my, Oh gosh, how could she, why didn't I see it earlier, My life is ruined, Oh now I remember how sloppy her cunt was, and the hickeys I inadvertently noticed on her neck. Heck I need a plan, Boy am I pissed, I can't wait till I get to use my Karate, no my Navy seal, no my Airborne combat training and beat the shit out of the other guy. Of course I know in my heart the other guy won't press charges because he's married and doesn't want to fuck up his poopy home. Tell me Brit Tease when were you going to tell us about how he had to take a short vacation to his cabin by the lake; remember the one his grandfather built back before the Civil War. And shit the guy never even went to the tavern, I mean pub, and got drunk as shit only to be picked up by some whore with a heart of gold who would give him the best blow job of his life. Come on Brit Tease you know us American guys aren't like you; we have standards!
By the way great little story; certainly a five.
Loved it all
Brit I find your wit so funny. I equate it to John Cleese (especially the parrot skit). I love all of your short or "flash" stories. And I do not understand why so many people need to be spoon fed an ending. What no mind of your own? Carvohi's comment was bang on. Please sir, may I have some more soup? Thank you Jim
Brit, I enjoy the fact that you allow the reader to decide how they would end the story, but it often leaves a sour taste in my mouth because I am curious to see how you, as the author, would have ended it.... Its your darling so while I am ok with reaching my own conclusions, I would much rather see how you would end things since you are the one who created these characters.
Come on guys!
I mean really!
Bri-tease gives you a revenge short, and nothing but a revenge short, and you have to ask which way a probability of reconciliation slants?
He has:
Just fucked her best friend
Just got her to out herself and her lover, to get him fired and divorced.
Set up a threesome with the other woman.
And you have to ask his attitude to staying with the woman? There is nothing in the story to suggest they stay together, other than an appreciation of her tits. Which he seems to appreciate better on the other woman.
Just sayin'.
(the italicized comment at the end was... teasing.)
Green-something
My only question is...
How many weeks and how many threesomes before he finally lets her know?
good story
but Colin is a cad of sorts.
not a cad
I think Colin is best described as being proactive.
More!
We need more great stories like this. Funny, insightful, and good! *****
WHEN YOU MAKE ODDS ON A WAGER
try and keep them in your favor. TK U MLJ LV NV
Odds?
Well, if he keeps getting regular threesomes I would hope the marriage odds get better!
Carvohi wins.
The award for most accurate comment on the site lol.
Cute and entertaining
I liked it 5* worth.
IT IS OK TO SEEK REVENGE, PAYBACK OR WHATEVER
but if you wish to split the sheets, don't make up a lot of BS, use the 50 ways to leave you lover, Say AMF and GO, TK U MLJ LV NV
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