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Horrible image -
It surely also paints it like a flash of lightning on your retina.
I wonder about the gently, though.
THE HEAT AND EXPLOSION
strips bare all it encompasses. TK U MLJ LV NV
i question
whether that shadow is grist
for the gallows
poem
that wall is not forgotten
also agree about the use of gently
didn't vote
Nuclear
Atomic death art... how avant-garde Painting supplies and models must be hard to find ...did vote
Powerful
I think the fact that the poem is so spare and to the point really works for you here. Words like "caress" and "gently," to me, help underscore the horror of the subject. I'm not sure "flesh clothes" is the best way to put this image: it seems a bit awkward to me. I might have said "clothes, flesh, bones/painting..." but that is just one opinion. Also not sure about "forgotten." Is it really forgotten? Or would something like "nameless" maybe work better?
Thank you for sharing this poem. Like I said, it's a powerful read.
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