All Comments on 'Friends and Siblings'

Very bland, void of details. Reads like a tech manual not a story,

I've read other stories that you have written and have enjoyed them greatly. With that said there are two things that needs to be asked? Why did you start in what is evidently the middle of the Story? Secondly did you even put any thought into this story or just put down random sentences. This is most differently one of your worst stories, however you do have an original idea for a story but need too redo it and start at the beginning. Please reconsider rewriting this and put in a beginning with some background than build on that.

it is never good to start in the middle of a story UNLESS you are going to do a LONG detailed flashback. but it is almost always better to start at the begining and work forward. think about deleting and doind a rewrite on this.