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rublicksover 11 years agoand you called this non erotic?
great premise i liked it,but could go on and on
doodlesdadover 11 years agoGet an editor
If you're going to do this again, for God's sake get an editor. This is barely in English.
Anonymousover 11 years agoQuite a good tale.
For which i thank you. Was reasonably well-writ, the one and only thing I picked up on was one spelling of florescent, in lieu of fluorescent. Florescent is to do with flower buds, Fluorescent is a glowing light.
Cheers, and Thanks.
Kilroy
Anonymousover 11 years agoAgree about the need for an editor
This was all but illiterate. Seriously, get an editor. Learn some writing technique.
Yecch...
chytownover 11 years agoFunny!!!!!
Sometimes you just need to sit down and write something what ever it maybe. And a lot of us will read and enjoy it. Thanks for sharing.
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