by Erin35
Ridiculous premise, and not well-executed. It reminds me of badly written British television, where it's cheaper to "infer" information rather than actually offer an explanation as to what the hell is going on. The problem with a lack of actual "substance" is that YOUR STORY LACKS ACTUAL SUBSTANCE!
Okay, i'll do my best on the next post and definitely plan it out more because I will admit this story was rushed through and not really given my best. Thanks sincerely for the help :)