Donna cheats on him Jake, then after getting back together Tim she fails to mention Jake is back in town, then after claiming she was working late she's caught having drinks with Jake, Tim gets lied to about her and Jake having an affair and of course freaks out.
Donna then has the fucking balls to be all butthurt about his lack of trust in her ! She is the one who should of swallowed her pride instead of getting pissy imho.
I am surprised that anyone can have anything bad to say about this story. Then again, there are a lot of people who have this BTB mentality, even if it is the worst choice. Tim and Donna grow so much in this story, it is impossible not to want them to make it. I have had a few girlfriends in college. One of them broke my heart, though not as drastic as it happened to Tim. I will tell you, if anyone of you has had a girlfriend who broke your heart in college, then came to you FIVE YEARS LATER to make amends, you would be an incredible idiot throw her out. Add the fact that he never really got over her, this is a heart warming thing. Then on top of that, the fact that their relationship made it through the fire, that makes them so much stronger.
People who have a BTB mentality, even when it isn't deserved, I feel sorry for them. Always being distrustful and unforgiving doesn't make you strong. Forgiveness doesn't make you weak. I got my heart broken, and had to forgive to move on. That doesn't make me weak in the slightest. I learned a lot and that is why I was able to move on and be confident in myself. If you have a BTB mentality that can't be satisfied without some sort of revenge, chances are you haven't moved on past the one who burned you. I barely remember the girl's face who burned me. Chances are every time you read a story about cheating you see the face of the one who burned you. Who is really the wimp?
As for the story, I liked it a lot. It was an EXCELLENT job. I feel this author could have a lucrative future in writing, it that is the path that he wanted to take. I feel in love with both characters. In fact, Jake was the only unlikeable one in the whole series. Great writing. I will look for more of your stories.
We still do not know what she did in the 5 years before she meet up with Tim.
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Anonymous08/15/13
ID so desperate for a guy card
he is trying to take one from S-Des? Go feed Tina or draw a liger you fucking gelding, only stallions are allowed to say who is in the club, not neutered runts, got it?
by
Anonymous09/01/13
Sorry anon, ID cannot respond atm
He is currently being brutally cucked, and not for the first time. During particularly vicious cuckings like the one he is getting now, it is not unusual for these timid she-men to seek refuge in silence.
It's nice to not have things devolve into three ways and group sex for a change. Stories like these are worth the time to read.
by
Anonymous10/26/13
Had me worried right up until the end..
I kept worrying that Jake would do something fatal as the end approached... Had me on edge the whole last chapter...
Jake was like a suicide bomber... when someone doesn't care about what happens after, it's amazing the things they can cause... Donna and Tim were beyond lucky to survive not just one but two attacks by him... if they hadn't both ultimately considered the other's welfare as more important than their own, he would have succeeded twice over...
Very nice to read a story like that no matter how much it hurt...
Her husband, whom she KNOWS is a reasonable and loving man, accused her of something with someone she knew. Did she look into things? She tried to talk to her hubby, but he was hurt too much. So...did she try ALTERNATE sources of information? Did she ask Jake? Did she ask Jake's GF? Did she ask the people at the restaurant? Did she ask Peter and Trisha, who KNEW the whole story so she could contradict it?
Because, if Tim told ME what he suspected, I would think he was behaving in a dramatic but reasonable fashion, particularly considering the details scumbag knew.
I think she could have been a bit more sensitive and engaged to save her marriage instead of the 'he won't talk to me and he called me names so I'm dropping him like a hot rock.'.
People took Tim to task for 'running away'. She did too and with less reason. Obviously there was a trigger but she put it all on him to 'fix' things.
Is there some reason the most hateful and cruel comments left here are all from anonymous types? Stop me if I'm going too fast, but...if you don't like the story or the types of stories a particular author writes, why read them? I'm really confused here--I honestly thought this forum was to help budding authors with writing skills and things like punctuation, grammar, and syntax. Perhaps to assist if an author has clearly hit a block in the story line, if that is apparent from the writing; not so much to spew vitriol simply because you don't agree with the plot line.
Personally, I'm infinitely more inclined to the "burn the bitch" stories, but that's only personal preference. Most authors are pretty good about identifying what type of story it is in the preface comments, and I just (stay with me here--stop me if I'm going too fast for you) DON'T READ THEM.
Anyone care to enlighten me about this? I truly AM curious about this syndrome.
Also, does writing in all caps and using obscure acronyms and abbreviations make comments more relevant? Or is this the fundamentalist preacher speaking technique (when preaching the Book, speak softly, when speaking personal opinion as if it WERE the Book, pound the podium and shout loudly)?
but what has got in through the cracks of time, TK U MLJ LV NV
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Anonymous02/21/14
another anon comment
to everyone who complains about the story,
this story is in the "loving wives" category. the description of that particular category is: "Married extra-marital fun: swinging, sharing & more."
now, with that being said, you should have expected everything that fits in that description. wimp. cuckold... you name it.
if you guys are here for the "witch hunt", you might be disappointed seeing that the majority of the story in this section describes it as "being aroused" while the wife have her affair.
i'm just saying that, if you hate cheating stories, avoid "Loving Wives".
i personally don't like it but i try to learn something from it.
by
Anonymous03/06/14
Funny.
How irondragon has the nerve to criticise other writers after posting some of the worst stories on the site.
This was a 5* story.
by
Anonymous03/21/14
Great read
Lots of drama yet a great read. Thanks for sharing.
thank you for such a wonderfull story. some people might not like it, but it tells us one important lession. fear it the real and only enemy. because of fear we make misstakes and act badly.
what i got from this story is, face your own fear, and you will have a happier life. taking to someone, opening up completly, is not easy, even if it is your partner. to open up is to be vulenrable. and being vulnerable is feared. noone wants it. and that is the main reason for lots of problems in our society.
thank you again, keep up the good work.
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Anonymous04/26/14
Great story
Great story well siren and was tough to put it down
Awesome.
Its long enough to get a feel to it.enough conversations.dialogues were pretty good.plot twists were mind blowing.Easily one of the best stories in this site and the best one i have read.
You need to start taking up some serious writing.
Thanks for the great story.
I don't believe any other writer in the LW genre has explored the possibility that love and commitment can allow a husband and wife to overcome the consequences of infidelity as well as you have. You have not minimized either the pain of betrayal or the corrosive impact of guilt but you have rejected the idea that a man's only appropriate response to a wife's infidelity is to label her a slut before throwing her out the door. There are far too many stories and critics on this site that relish the woman hating bitterness of that approach. I applaud the originality, writing skill, and ethical standards that have taken your stories down a better road. I sincerely hope that you have not stopped posting on this site for you would be sorely missed. P.S. Bringing in John and Jennifer from your earlier work in the last segment was a nice touch.
great story! I only remembered a few "scenes" from my previous reading. Certainly not the last scene(s). This is S-D's most recent Lit. story. It's been less than two years; I hope he/she returns.
Twenty total stars. Just added to my favorite stories and S-Des as a favorite author. "Fools Envy" is also one of my favorites.
I look on these stories like a vacation trip, for me the destination does not matter, what is important is that the trip be enjoyable. I really enjoyed this one.
I admit that classifying it as BTB or RACC would eliminate a lot of readers, so I would argue against labeling stories. This is beautifully done and the ending is not that important. I strongly suggest to the newbies that they go back and read all of
S-Des's contributions. They are impressive.
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Anonymous08/10/14
AHHHH, THANK YOU ,THANK YOU *****++++++
YOU SURE MAKE A GOOD STORY TELLER LOL...
TIM SORT OF REMINDS ME OF ME WAY BACK WHEN IN THE 60'S
I read this when SD posted it. Has been long enough that I mostly didn't remember the details. I usually don't like RAAC stories, but this one makes sense. Really liked the ending. As others have commented, the writing is superb.
I pretty much expected Donna to divorce Tim, since it was Tim who demanded communication and no secrets, and so on. He comes across as naive and gullible, and Donna is the strong one.
5*
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Anonymous10/04/14
Trust
She screwed him over before. Is it really so far fetched that she would do it again? History repeats itself, so it's hard for me to blame Tim for his overreaction.
Self righteous indignation. Personally he would have been so much better off with someone else without the history. Hard to live life not being able to trust.
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Anonymous12/20/14
A 10 is not enough.
Pissed me off that there is not a 20 star for me to click. A work of art. KEEP UP THE GREAT WRITING.
An excellent tale that had me off balance, sad and befuddled.
I skipped several sex scenes just to find out what happened, and you write some hot scenes :)
Definitely a favorite, thanks for sharing.
I don't like the name Daryl, but who shives a git? Tim is still a sap. I hope ass-wipe, Jake, is out of the picture for good. Cheers!
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Anonymous03/10/15
Long story and worth every minute
Congrats. Great story. Five out of five. There were a couple of times when I had no idea where this story was headed. Jake's cruel attack in the restaurant was brilliant and almost defeated Tim and Donna. I like how they had to overcome two obstacles, their own history and Jake's second interference. Even though I gave this a five out of five, there were a couple of times with Tim seemed to change his opinion too quickly. But that is a minor quibble. keep up the good work.
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Anonymous03/28/15
Just re-read
I stumbled back over this after having read it when it came out (and then forgot about it). While reading it with new eyes but with a hazily remembered idea of the story I found that I think it's maybe a little too symmetrical. Both the Tim and Donna characters do something foolish for foolish reasons and then torture themselves and then try to redeem themselves in the same way (and yes, BTB Bitches, I know that the actual crimes are different, but the motivation and the reasoning for their responses are the same). It gets to be a little much of a much.
The wraparound does help soften that edge a bit. Though in the end it's just an interesting bit of business that could have been easily cut and the story would have remained more or less the same.
You must have been. NO street drug is that powerful! Something psychotropic, perhaps? Neither of the leads likable/believable, plot thinner than cheap beer and a near omnipotent antagonist? Lordy, Lordy! Literotica must come up with a way to give negative scores.
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Anonymous06/02/15
Cover all your bases.
With the "coworkers confession" so many things don't make sense if it was true so Tim's right she really should have been an actress. Unless you got so excited about the ending you forgot to explain everything? Not sure.
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Anonymous06/12/15
Loved it
The only part I would have liked to have read would be Pete throwing asshole Jake off a bridge into deep cold water. Love your writing. Don't pay attention to the naysayers. They would bitch if their ice cream was cold.
Enjoyed the tale, liked the characters. The were flawed, but believable and drew the reader into the story line.
Fun ending. Thanks for the good read.
Please keep writing!
There was a scientific study done a number of years ago that asked the question would people rather believe fact or fiction. The conclusion was that the majority of people would rather believe gossip, hear-say, innuendo you name it rather than fact.
In support of this finding you have organized religion, the news media and politics.
George W. Bush convinced the people that Saddam Hussein had nuclear weapons and they believed him and supported him. WHY because they heard what they wanted to hear!
I think that since this study under mines politicians big time it has been hard to fine.
Authors who complain about the comments they have received, might take time and find this study
The wrapper about Pete and Daryl and the later passage about insecurity and not wanting to accept a doormat near the end saved a weak story.
Even after being dressed up nice, it's still a story that sounds like it's out of the 50's. Jock takes the nerd's girl? Really? In the mid 90's? Sorry, sounds like old people writing for old people. By the mid 90's jocks were getting tribal tats and trying to fit in with the metal heads or the alternative rocker crowd. By the mid 'aughts when the story concludes, the culture had already shifted and the jocks were just part of the crowd waiting to see what the nerds did next since they were in control of pretty much everything. Hell, by then there weren't many pure jocks around. Athletes sure, but jocks in the stereotype sense? Not so much... Certainly not enough to hold this Biff Tanner / Marty McFly tale together.
It is well written with excellent prose and dialogue. The characters are flawed but likable and show good development over the course of the story. The emotions that he felt when she betrayed him and cheated on him just as he was about to propose are portrayed well as is his sense of utter devastation.
The author dug a hole which seemed to be insurmountable but wrote so well that reconciliation was believable and welcomed even though the reader was made to feel that her traitorous actions were unforgivable.
The second episode of 'cheating' was a great addition and I for one believed something was up but didn't quite either if you know what I mean!
Please produce more stories of such quality for this site as this seems to be your last one for over 3 years.
English
Love it
Thank you for a very nice story.
Please write us more stories like that one!
way to much one sided blame
So let me get this straight....
Donna cheats on him Jake, then after getting back together Tim she fails to mention Jake is back in town, then after claiming she was working late she's caught having drinks with Jake, Tim gets lied to about her and Jake having an affair and of course freaks out.
Donna then has the fucking balls to be all butthurt about his lack of trust in her ! She is the one who should of swallowed her pride instead of getting pissy imho.
Reconciliation and Forgiveness
I am surprised that anyone can have anything bad to say about this story. Then again, there are a lot of people who have this BTB mentality, even if it is the worst choice. Tim and Donna grow so much in this story, it is impossible not to want them to make it. I have had a few girlfriends in college. One of them broke my heart, though not as drastic as it happened to Tim. I will tell you, if anyone of you has had a girlfriend who broke your heart in college, then came to you FIVE YEARS LATER to make amends, you would be an incredible idiot throw her out. Add the fact that he never really got over her, this is a heart warming thing. Then on top of that, the fact that their relationship made it through the fire, that makes them so much stronger.
People who have a BTB mentality, even when it isn't deserved, I feel sorry for them. Always being distrustful and unforgiving doesn't make you strong. Forgiveness doesn't make you weak. I got my heart broken, and had to forgive to move on. That doesn't make me weak in the slightest. I learned a lot and that is why I was able to move on and be confident in myself. If you have a BTB mentality that can't be satisfied without some sort of revenge, chances are you haven't moved on past the one who burned you. I barely remember the girl's face who burned me. Chances are every time you read a story about cheating you see the face of the one who burned you. Who is really the wimp?
As for the story, I liked it a lot. It was an EXCELLENT job. I feel this author could have a lucrative future in writing, it that is the path that he wanted to take. I feel in love with both characters. In fact, Jake was the only unlikeable one in the whole series. Great writing. I will look for more of your stories.
5 years
We still do not know what she did in the 5 years before she meet up with Tim.
ID so desperate for a guy card
he is trying to take one from S-Des? Go feed Tina or draw a liger you fucking gelding, only stallions are allowed to say who is in the club, not neutered runts, got it?
Sorry anon, ID cannot respond atm
He is currently being brutally cucked, and not for the first time. During particularly vicious cuckings like the one he is getting now, it is not unusual for these timid she-men to seek refuge in silence.
Carry on.
Good story
It's nice to not have things devolve into three ways and group sex for a change. Stories like these are worth the time to read.
Had me worried right up until the end..
I kept worrying that Jake would do something fatal as the end approached... Had me on edge the whole last chapter...
Jake was like a suicide bomber... when someone doesn't care about what happens after, it's amazing the things they can cause... Donna and Tim were beyond lucky to survive not just one but two attacks by him... if they hadn't both ultimately considered the other's welfare as more important than their own, he would have succeeded twice over...
Very nice to read a story like that no matter how much it hurt...
I loved the story
Yes, there is a 'but'.
She had a bit of insensitivity.
She has a history.
She had RECENTLY lied to her husband.
Her husband, whom she KNOWS is a reasonable and loving man, accused her of something with someone she knew. Did she look into things? She tried to talk to her hubby, but he was hurt too much. So...did she try ALTERNATE sources of information? Did she ask Jake? Did she ask Jake's GF? Did she ask the people at the restaurant? Did she ask Peter and Trisha, who KNEW the whole story so she could contradict it?
Because, if Tim told ME what he suspected, I would think he was behaving in a dramatic but reasonable fashion, particularly considering the details scumbag knew.
I think she could have been a bit more sensitive and engaged to save her marriage instead of the 'he won't talk to me and he called me names so I'm dropping him like a hot rock.'.
People took Tim to task for 'running away'. She did too and with less reason. Obviously there was a trigger but she put it all on him to 'fix' things.
So well written. Characterisations, dialog, plot, it has it all.
Very impressed sir. More please?
General question for all readers
Is there some reason the most hateful and cruel comments left here are all from anonymous types? Stop me if I'm going too fast, but...if you don't like the story or the types of stories a particular author writes, why read them? I'm really confused here--I honestly thought this forum was to help budding authors with writing skills and things like punctuation, grammar, and syntax. Perhaps to assist if an author has clearly hit a block in the story line, if that is apparent from the writing; not so much to spew vitriol simply because you don't agree with the plot line.
Personally, I'm infinitely more inclined to the "burn the bitch" stories, but that's only personal preference. Most authors are pretty good about identifying what type of story it is in the preface comments, and I just (stay with me here--stop me if I'm going too fast for you) DON'T READ THEM.
Anyone care to enlighten me about this? I truly AM curious about this syndrome.
Short follow up to previous question
Also, does writing in all caps and using obscure acronyms and abbreviations make comments more relevant? Or is this the fundamentalist preacher speaking technique (when preaching the Book, speak softly, when speaking personal opinion as if it WERE the Book, pound the podium and shout loudly)?
THE CIRCLE IS COMPLETE
but what has got in through the cracks of time, TK U MLJ LV NV
another anon comment
to everyone who complains about the story,
this story is in the "loving wives" category. the description of that particular category is: "Married extra-marital fun: swinging, sharing & more."
now, with that being said, you should have expected everything that fits in that description. wimp. cuckold... you name it.
if you guys are here for the "witch hunt", you might be disappointed seeing that the majority of the story in this section describes it as "being aroused" while the wife have her affair.
i'm just saying that, if you hate cheating stories, avoid "Loving Wives".
i personally don't like it but i try to learn something from it.
Funny.
How irondragon has the nerve to criticise other writers after posting some of the worst stories on the site.
This was a 5* story.
Great read
Lots of drama yet a great read. Thanks for sharing.
I'm sorry, but
It's hard to feel empathy for such a stupid wuss.
Sweet Story
And I love a happy ending, but, sheesh, people, TALK to each other!
thank you
thank you for such a wonderfull story. some people might not like it, but it tells us one important lession. fear it the real and only enemy. because of fear we make misstakes and act badly.
what i got from this story is, face your own fear, and you will have a happier life. taking to someone, opening up completly, is not easy, even if it is your partner. to open up is to be vulenrable. and being vulnerable is feared. noone wants it. and that is the main reason for lots of problems in our society.
thank you again, keep up the good work.
Great story
Great story well siren and was tough to put it down
At least a score of 20.
EXCELLENT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Don't stop writing!!!!!!!!!!!
one hell of a story
Awesome.
Its long enough to get a feel to it.enough conversations.dialogues were pretty good.plot twists were mind blowing.Easily one of the best stories in this site and the best one i have read.
You need to start taking up some serious writing.
Thanks for the great story.
a very good love story had tears toward the end
5 *
It's difficult for me to give 5 *, but this one deserves it...maybe 6 if possible! Congratulations!!!!
The best I've read on this board
The best I've read on this board... Great story.
faithful
Thanks,I didn't think they wrote about faithful spouse on Literotica
Forgiveness and Reconciliation
I don't believe any other writer in the LW genre has explored the possibility that love and commitment can allow a husband and wife to overcome the consequences of infidelity as well as you have. You have not minimized either the pain of betrayal or the corrosive impact of guilt but you have rejected the idea that a man's only appropriate response to a wife's infidelity is to label her a slut before throwing her out the door. There are far too many stories and critics on this site that relish the woman hating bitterness of that approach. I applaud the originality, writing skill, and ethical standards that have taken your stories down a better road. I sincerely hope that you have not stopped posting on this site for you would be sorely missed. P.S. Bringing in John and Jennifer from your earlier work in the last segment was a nice touch.
What a
great story! I only remembered a few "scenes" from my previous reading. Certainly not the last scene(s). This is S-D's most recent Lit. story. It's been less than two years; I hope he/she returns.
Twenty total stars. Just added to my favorite stories and S-Des as a favorite author. "Fools Envy" is also one of my favorites.
Excellent Storytelling
I look on these stories like a vacation trip, for me the destination does not matter, what is important is that the trip be enjoyable. I really enjoyed this one.
I admit that classifying it as BTB or RACC would eliminate a lot of readers, so I would argue against labeling stories. This is beautifully done and the ending is not that important. I strongly suggest to the newbies that they go back and read all of
S-Des's contributions. They are impressive.
AHHHH, THANK YOU ,THANK YOU *****++++++
YOU SURE MAKE A GOOD STORY TELLER LOL...
TIM SORT OF REMINDS ME OF ME WAY BACK WHEN IN THE 60'S
Reads well the second time around
I read this when SD posted it. Has been long enough that I mostly didn't remember the details. I usually don't like RAAC stories, but this one makes sense. Really liked the ending. As others have commented, the writing is superb.
Very good and interesting
I pretty much expected Donna to divorce Tim, since it was Tim who demanded communication and no secrets, and so on. He comes across as naive and gullible, and Donna is the strong one.
5*
Trust
She screwed him over before. Is it really so far fetched that she would do it again? History repeats itself, so it's hard for me to blame Tim for his overreaction.
Self righteous indignation. Personally he would have been so much better off with someone else without the history. Hard to live life not being able to trust.
A 10 is not enough.
Pissed me off that there is not a 20 star for me to click. A work of art. KEEP UP THE GREAT WRITING.
Now that a story!
It s rare that we have a great story of this caliber. Thank you!
speechless.
An excellent tale that had me off balance, sad and befuddled.
I skipped several sex scenes just to find out what happened, and you write some hot scenes :)
Definitely a favorite, thanks for sharing.
****
I don't like the name Daryl, but who shives a git? Tim is still a sap. I hope ass-wipe, Jake, is out of the picture for good. Cheers!
Long story and worth every minute
Congrats. Great story. Five out of five. There were a couple of times when I had no idea where this story was headed. Jake's cruel attack in the restaurant was brilliant and almost defeated Tim and Donna. I like how they had to overcome two obstacles, their own history and Jake's second interference. Even though I gave this a five out of five, there were a couple of times with Tim seemed to change his opinion too quickly. But that is a minor quibble. keep up the good work.
Just re-read
I stumbled back over this after having read it when it came out (and then forgot about it). While reading it with new eyes but with a hazily remembered idea of the story I found that I think it's maybe a little too symmetrical. Both the Tim and Donna characters do something foolish for foolish reasons and then torture themselves and then try to redeem themselves in the same way (and yes, BTB Bitches, I know that the actual crimes are different, but the motivation and the reasoning for their responses are the same). It gets to be a little much of a much.
The wraparound does help soften that edge a bit. Though in the end it's just an interesting bit of business that could have been easily cut and the story would have remained more or less the same.
Were you on meds when you wrote this?
You must have been. NO street drug is that powerful! Something psychotropic, perhaps? Neither of the leads likable/believable, plot thinner than cheap beer and a near omnipotent antagonist? Lordy, Lordy! Literotica must come up with a way to give negative scores.
Cover all your bases.
With the "coworkers confession" so many things don't make sense if it was true so Tim's right she really should have been an actress. Unless you got so excited about the ending you forgot to explain everything? Not sure.
Loved it
The only part I would have liked to have read would be Pete throwing asshole Jake off a bridge into deep cold water. Love your writing. Don't pay attention to the naysayers. They would bitch if their ice cream was cold.
Good Story, Nice Conclusion
Enjoyed the tale, liked the characters. The were flawed, but believable and drew the reader into the story line.
Fun ending. Thanks for the good read.
Please keep writing!
Great Story
There was a scientific study done a number of years ago that asked the question would people rather believe fact or fiction. The conclusion was that the majority of people would rather believe gossip, hear-say, innuendo you name it rather than fact.
In support of this finding you have organized religion, the news media and politics.
George W. Bush convinced the people that Saddam Hussein had nuclear weapons and they believed him and supported him. WHY because they heard what they wanted to hear!
I think that since this study under mines politicians big time it has been hard to fine.
Authors who complain about the comments they have received, might take time and find this study
Saved by the bell...
The wrapper about Pete and Daryl and the later passage about insecurity and not wanting to accept a doormat near the end saved a weak story.
Even after being dressed up nice, it's still a story that sounds like it's out of the 50's. Jock takes the nerd's girl? Really? In the mid 90's? Sorry, sounds like old people writing for old people. By the mid 90's jocks were getting tribal tats and trying to fit in with the metal heads or the alternative rocker crowd. By the mid 'aughts when the story concludes, the culture had already shifted and the jocks were just part of the crowd waiting to see what the nerds did next since they were in control of pretty much everything. Hell, by then there weren't many pure jocks around. Athletes sure, but jocks in the stereotype sense? Not so much... Certainly not enough to hold this Biff Tanner / Marty McFly tale together.
Over all!
This complete story is a roller coaster ride, but a well written one that was enjoyable to read.
2nd read and remembering....
how great the story and writing was (is).
Thanks again for sharing on Lit.
x
Great story 5*
It is well written with excellent prose and dialogue. The characters are flawed but likable and show good development over the course of the story. The emotions that he felt when she betrayed him and cheated on him just as he was about to propose are portrayed well as is his sense of utter devastation.
The author dug a hole which seemed to be insurmountable but wrote so well that reconciliation was believable and welcomed even though the reader was made to feel that her traitorous actions were unforgivable.
The second episode of 'cheating' was a great addition and I for one believed something was up but didn't quite either if you know what I mean!
Please produce more stories of such quality for this site as this seems to be your last one for over 3 years.
As usual...
...you got the Emotions dead on !!
Third or fourth time reading hasn't reduced the effect your story has on me.
Thanks for a brilliant 'read' - keep on,keeping on !!
Second time through...
Still five stars. One of the best. Emotional ending. I like how well you developed these characters.
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