All Comments on 'First Time'

That escalated quickly ...

Nice attempt

Fast and yet full of emotion.

It didnt have much depth.

Not only was this over practically before it began, it just doesn't even come close to ringing true. A college girl just back home from school for a short visit? And she doesn't know what Daddy is doing to her? Doesn't realize the implications of his cock sliding inside her virgin pussy, but within moments is shouting, "Fuck me, Daddy!" like an experienced tramp? It seems more like it was a re-write, with the original story featuring a pre-teen girl, but altered so that it would pass legal policy.

This was a thinly-veiled rape-cest story and even on that merit, came off as pretty weak. Do your audience a favor: don't insult our intelligence.

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That was quick and sweet, err to the point. I've read the comments; I wouldn't call it rape, or underage sex. This is more like an idea for a story line that has a lot more "fleshing out" needed! My daughter never claimed innocence or lack of knowledge. Of course she never had sex with her father either! There are hundreds of possibilities of how this story could go, pick a few and make me happy!

RS

Awful....you jumped straight into it, it had no pace, no story to it and then ended really quickly. Worst I have read.

You have only posted once, so I'm assuming you are a new writer... I think your on the right track to writing some great stories, you just need to bring more depth, some "background" to the caracters. Let the story build-up. Speaking for myself, I like when I kinda get to know a caracter, and almost put myself in the story, that is what the great writers do. At least that's my opinion, to each there own... I wish you well with your writings...

what a caracter might be? Something to do with cars perhaps?

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