Loved it. Good luck with the publishing. For the past two years you have entertained us with the wonderful world you have created and the great characters you have written. I wish you the best when your book or books go digital.
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Anonymous10/25/12
Wow! Talk about a leaving us hanging!
OMG! This is leaving me hanging even more now! Please continue this story ASAP... I'm gonna be dying until I know what happens next. Please continue this as soon as you can. Good luck on your FTI book!
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Anonymous10/25/12
That's just wrong!!!
You cannot have this story end like that. I want to know what happens next.
Great story. Awesome ending. However, there are some grammatical errors in this chapter.
I am so mad at how that ended! But only because I gotta wait for the new story. Oh well. Impatiently waiting, Lisa.
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Anonymous10/25/12
Such an ending, very good or rather just plain wonderful. I can't wait for the next episode in this saga, soooooooooo impatient. Keep up the wonderful writing and story telling Jaz.
How could Annie know the specifics of a freaking vision!!! If he would have been more reasonable the Queen would not have had to take over. This really upsets me, they are supposed to be soul mates is 25 the death knoll for all relationships? Say it aint so. They are my favorite couple...Love the story!
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Anonymous10/25/12
love the story...
but that was a shitty way to end it. especially when you're taking a hiatus from writing.
So evil to end it like this :(
I loved the whole entire FTI saga ! I cant believe how you draw me into the FTI world, especially this last chapter, which is NOT an ending, by the way.
How can you take a hiatus now? So evil to make us wait. I want to find out more of what happens btw Liam and Reasa; and Annie and Caleb.. I also want Karn and Elina's story; and Kallum's too.
Please dont take too long a hiatus. And keep us all updated with your progress on publishing. I will be there to buy ALL your books.
Oh, should we inundate your prospective publisher with emails? Who is the publisher?
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Anonymous10/25/12
Caleb is a piece of work.
Caleb wanted Theresa dead when Anakatrine fulfilled his wishes now she a bitch typical. You would think he'd be happy cause he got what he wanted. Now when she needs him the most he turn against her wow who would of thought.
I honestly am closed to tears. I basically guessed that's what Anakatrine was going to do and honestly I think it is what Reasa deserved. What makes me sad is the fact that the others don't agree to it. What make me sad is that people who I thought were good, caring people who would protect their family didn't want to let their family member's mate live. They wanted to KILL her. I mean they could have just severely punished her and then let her live. What makes me the most sad however is the fact that Caleb reacted that way even after Anakatrine's warning. He just completely broke Annie's heart just because he let his fury get the best of him. He didn't listen to her at all and I know that no matter how much people say they hope that everything is patched up with them, their relationship and everyone else's relationship with Annie will be forever alter, even if it's just in a small way...
The worst part about it is I would have acted exactly as Annie/Anakatrine did.
I know you deserve a hiatus, but this is just awful. Leaving us hanging like this. My heart breaks reading this supposed end and it won't mend until you fix it. I seriously hope you make it a short break, I love your stories and can't wait to read more!
I'll be impatiently waiting until the end of next month. i agree whole-heartly with vixenfurry comment. enjoy your time off, but please let us know when your book hits the store so we can purchase it. you have our love, support and well wishes.
I usually hold back on criticism, but it simply is poor style, to end a story without addressing ALL the major plot points. What Annkatrine did opened to much. This is not the end of a story arc it is the beginning a completely new one. And please, stop with the cliffhangers already. I know you can write a story that sucks you in without leaving us hanging every three pages. It's beneath the quality of the writing you put out.
Since all you ever give us is cliffhangers it is not a shock that this chapter ended with yet another one. Funny Annie was always getting on my goat because she was soooo perfect miss sweetness and so knowing ect..NOW she is pissing me of because she is a mean bitch that has hurt her mate and everyone else around her! Ah well enjoy your break and hope you finish the next story completely before you start posting chapters so we can go back to shorter gaps between instead of weeks or months.
I know this was a very good chapter, but I really wish I had not read it until the sequel to it was available. I know you like cliff hangers but this is one I could have done without.
No, no, no. I hate it and I love it.
This is my favorite series and with that ending its just not fair. Good luck with the book and enjoy your break...but hurry back!
Amazing! This chapter made up for the bland (sorry!) last chapter ... Times 10!! I loved it, absolutely amazing. I love how you ended it, perfect. It just sucks that it will be awhile till we can read what comes next! Enjoy your break and hurry back - Please!!!
P.S. Loved it so much I am going to read it again right now :)
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Anonymous10/25/12
LOL WLALB
The End!!!!!!!!!!
But Jaz, I don't want it to be the end.
Your really enjoy the mental ro-sham-bo you practice on us readers, you are so evil.
No the thriple hell you did not just end it this way!!!!!! JAZZ!!! Ok!! Im gonna try to calm down because I just got a head rush when I screamed!!! Whooo!! Ive just come to realize that you are the devil or at least some kind of high level demon spawn from hell!!! Only such a person could torture us like this and find great pleasure in doing so!! Evil woman enjoy your hiatus as we continue to suffer and I look foward to your next story!!
i know everyone is beyond pissed with how you left this chapter and about you going on hiatus but i do understand why you ended this as you did, i truly do hope you get well rested on your hiatus because we (Your loyal readers) will be going insane waiting, i do love this chapter! Liam is devastated as all the others but what other choice did they leave Anakatrine, there was none, she warned Caleb and everyone else what would come about but they let their fury get in the way of seeing there was no other choice in the matter...i do know in the next story you will try to make things right but i think it will be difficult to achieve, i do think that Anne will be lost and Anakatrine will remain which is sad because Caleb pushed her into this situation instead of trusting in HIS MATE like his should have...ok enough of my babbling...Excellent chapter hun...
Donna
You got to be joking, please make it a short hiatus I can't wait to read more. I totally love reading your work and hope you'll be back soon with more. Hope you have a good break
the best way to keep the story fresh, it was still great and I loved reading them. But apart of me still felt that it was getting to perfect i.e very one will find a mate and with the triumvirate guarding and guiding everyone and being happy with there mate. Now the king and queen at odds and the demon in one of the Vârcolac. just great I am even more hooked a will be waiting for the next one, and trying to think of were you are going with this as I do with all the story that I love. Most of the time I am wrong but that makes it even better
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Anonymous10/25/12
Wow!; that's quite the cliffhanger - biggest one by far from you. Quite a powerful ending. Enjoy your down time; we all will be waiting for the next installment.
I was so happy you posted in such a short time now I'm dying for the next story I feel so much for Annie with her natural empathy she will be hit so hard by this love it!!!!
you think you can still take a break after ending this book here? Ok you still deserve a break but that is besides the point after ending here, how could you? This all started w/a vamp and a frail human girl who was dealing w/the lose of her brother. We have traveled so far and yet we really haven't really, not really. So now like so many others I will await your "break" and still check daily in the hopes that you couldn't turn your brain off and a new chapter has posted. Hey you can't take away all my fantasies...hehe-he
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Anonymous10/25/12
god given talent
this is a pure artist work.,. can't wait on the next stories
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Anonymous10/25/12
Patpricka
This is my second time posting on here and this will be my last. I wish you all the best on your publishing stratch that I KNOW YOU WILL GET PUBLISHED! Your a genius and a phenomenal writer. Normally I get antsy and annoyed with series but you have pulled me into these sagas. I appreciate you and I'll be sure to buy your books when they make it in Barnes and Nobles. Don't let noone deter you because you have a gift and I'm glad you decided to share it with me and others. ~ Cheers to you Jaz and your future endeavors.
Now on to this last chapter. I loved it and I agree with what Anaktrine did I think it was beyond fair. I find it funny that Caleb was going to kill her indefinitly and the others stood up for Liam but he wasn't tested either. That was a bitch and weak move for Caleb. I don't understand the animosity towards Anaktrine she just turned her human and striped her of her powers. Rease didn't die she's still alive basically what Anaktrine did is make her walk a road of redemption which I think is deserving. Rease has to prove that she has grown and a genuine person now instead of causing turmoil for her malice ways and thought process. I just don't understand why everyone is so upset either Rease was going to get death/banishment for her crimes which would have killed Liam and destroyed the structure. This way Rease has a chance to redeam/right her wrong doings so I agree with Anaktrine punishment. Now I just feel for Anna because she is going to be crushed. For Caleb he can go f himself. Caleb is wrong and I have no sympthay to give him espicially since he wanted to KILL Rease and called Anaktrine a bitch for allowing her to REDEAM herself. I also know this has changed the structure of everything and the relationships for Anna towards everybody but for them to fill loathe for her is riduculous. Rease being a human is not a death sentence its redemption and she is not dead or killed which was the other option. I think they should be grateful for the outcome that has so much to gain instead of Rease's permenant death.
Looking forward to the next saga. I'll be waiting.
~ Sincerly Patpricka
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Anonymous10/25/12
Excellent!
Wow, who would have thought that the bonds of fidelity would be so weak between people who seemed so strong? Some of the strongest people who were supposed to love and respect each other and Annie/Anakatrine just turned on her to side with a bigot who attempted to murder their own and was directly responsible for the torture, maiming and near death of Pietro.
Reasa was under sentence of death, their queen gave her the hardest, yet kindest judgement she could in the circumstances – Reasa deserved the punishment she received, if they cannot see it, there is no hope for any of them. Those attacking the Vârcolac needed to know that there would be consequences for their attacks (and Reasa now has the opportunity to try to make amends, if that is even possible). I believe that even Liam should see this (I really disliked his spiteful reaction at the end, it seemed very out of character).
As for Caleb? Wow, some soulmate he turned out to be. Annie/Anakatrine deserves far more trust and loyalty from her people, especially from the one who is supposed to love her above all else.
I really hope that Jaz doesn't cast Liam as some sort of revenge seeking villain (which would be ridiculous, he is supposed to be a powerful empathic, if anyone on the planet would understand, it would be him - even if he didn't like it) he’d be better served trying to educate Reasa out of her bigoted ignorance.
and the y re simple, Caleb/callain are not one, so while annie/ankatrinna ( i know i might be misspelling , but the idea is sound) are, so they will not ever see eye to eye anymore, the second, there might just be another who is as powerful mentally as Annie, Liam , as he just proved, and the final, , reasa may no longer be a vampire, but who is to say see no longer has her empath abilities, so in closing, kick ass story, and i cannot await the next "book" of it
joe catanese( catman71)
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Anonymous10/25/12
WOW!!!!!!!
I can't believe you ended it like that. I hope your hiatus isn't that long cause I'm itching to finish this story. That was a MASSIVE cliffhanger. I'll be on pins & needles till you post again
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Anonymous10/25/12
Now you're pulling Steven Kings stunts.
Annakatrine was barely mentioned and never fleshed out, and suddenly she appears to met out "justice" and show that her limitless powers allow her to bring back to human. As Caleb stated "When had she become this powerful?". I asked myself the same question. This reminds me of Steven King stories like The Stand, where at the climactic moment of good versus evil the hand of God suddenly appears out of nowhere to detonate the bomb and met out justice to the wicked. I just finished reading his book Duma Key and he did the same thing at around page 577. I appreciate that you are spending time getting your work published, but not taking the time to build up to Annakatrine's power is lazy writing and not up to your skills. King can get away with this, but you need to prove yourself outside of this small (but enthusiastic) Literotica group. Good luck on your publishing pursuits.
Yves
English
Loved it. Good luck with the publishing. For the past two years you have entertained us with the wonderful world you have created and the great characters you have written. I wish you the best when your book or books go digital.
Wow! Talk about a leaving us hanging!
OMG! This is leaving me hanging even more now! Please continue this story ASAP... I'm gonna be dying until I know what happens next. Please continue this as soon as you can. Good luck on your FTI book!
That's just wrong!!!
You cannot have this story end like that. I want to know what happens next.
Great story. Awesome ending. However, there are some grammatical errors in this chapter.
i feel so bad for annie. She needs a hug.
I am so mad at how that ended! But only because I gotta wait for the new story. Oh well. Impatiently waiting, Lisa.
Such an ending, very good or rather just plain wonderful. I can't wait for the next episode in this saga, soooooooooo impatient. Keep up the wonderful writing and story telling Jaz.
/Toby
Caleb is being a jerk!
How could Annie know the specifics of a freaking vision!!! If he would have been more reasonable the Queen would not have had to take over. This really upsets me, they are supposed to be soul mates is 25 the death knoll for all relationships? Say it aint so. They are my favorite couple...Love the story!
love the story...
but that was a shitty way to end it. especially when you're taking a hiatus from writing.
So evil .... But I still love you
So evil to end it like this :(
I loved the whole entire FTI saga ! I cant believe how you draw me into the FTI world, especially this last chapter, which is NOT an ending, by the way.
How can you take a hiatus now? So evil to make us wait. I want to find out more of what happens btw Liam and Reasa; and Annie and Caleb.. I also want Karn and Elina's story; and Kallum's too.
Please dont take too long a hiatus. And keep us all updated with your progress on publishing. I will be there to buy ALL your books.
Oh, should we inundate your prospective publisher with emails? Who is the publisher?
Caleb is a piece of work.
Caleb wanted Theresa dead when Anakatrine fulfilled his wishes now she a bitch typical. You would think he'd be happy cause he got what he wanted. Now when she needs him the most he turn against her wow who would of thought.
Brilliant!!!
Jaz, that was brilliant as ever. And I hope you enjoy your free time and after that come back for more!!!
This ending is actually sad...
I honestly am closed to tears. I basically guessed that's what Anakatrine was going to do and honestly I think it is what Reasa deserved. What makes me sad is the fact that the others don't agree to it. What make me sad is that people who I thought were good, caring people who would protect their family didn't want to let their family member's mate live. They wanted to KILL her. I mean they could have just severely punished her and then let her live. What makes me the most sad however is the fact that Caleb reacted that way even after Anakatrine's warning. He just completely broke Annie's heart just because he let his fury get the best of him. He didn't listen to her at all and I know that no matter how much people say they hope that everything is patched up with them, their relationship and everyone else's relationship with Annie will be forever alter, even if it's just in a small way...
The worst part about it is I would have acted exactly as Annie/Anakatrine did.
And now I AM crying...
No fair!
I know you deserve a hiatus, but this is just awful. Leaving us hanging like this. My heart breaks reading this supposed end and it won't mend until you fix it. I seriously hope you make it a short break, I love your stories and can't wait to read more!
Oh my gawd!!!!!!! If I could climb through my phone to strangle you!!!!!! How the heck!!!!
Okay I'm over it... Bloody brilliant Jaz... Not even I expected that. U have jst proven why you are such a briliant writer.
Now let the little hiatus be short, I am anxiously awaiting the next story...
Is the hiatus over yet
Annakatine i mean Jaz you are evil one miss Grinch. Enjoy your break and thanks for the entertainment. Mike from Texas.
DAMN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
WHAT A CLIFFHANGER!!!!!!!
I'll be impatiently waiting until the end of next month. i agree whole-heartly with vixenfurry comment. enjoy your time off, but please let us know when your book hits the store so we can purchase it. you have our love, support and well wishes.
Poor Storytelling!
I usually hold back on criticism, but it simply is poor style, to end a story without addressing ALL the major plot points. What Annkatrine did opened to much. This is not the end of a story arc it is the beginning a completely new one. And please, stop with the cliffhangers already. I know you can write a story that sucks you in without leaving us hanging every three pages. It's beneath the quality of the writing you put out.
Speechless
Um, I'm speechless. Wow!
Aaarrrrggggg!!!!!
Now I have to think of another curse to use on you!!!! You are an evil woman Jazz.
Great writer but evil!!!!
Classic Mistress Jaz!
Love it!
WOW
And yea speechless is the right word
Ah ha! A cliffhanger what a surprise...NOT!
Since all you ever give us is cliffhangers it is not a shock that this chapter ended with yet another one. Funny Annie was always getting on my goat because she was soooo perfect miss sweetness and so knowing ect..NOW she is pissing me of because she is a mean bitch that has hurt her mate and everyone else around her! Ah well enjoy your break and hope you finish the next story completely before you start posting chapters so we can go back to shorter gaps between instead of weeks or months.
I know this was a very good chapter, but I really wish I had not read it until the sequel to it was available. I know you like cliff hangers but this is one I could have done without.
No, no, no. I hate it and I love it.
This is my favorite series and with that ending its just not fair. Good luck with the book and enjoy your break...but hurry back!
Oh. My. God.
Amazing! This chapter made up for the bland (sorry!) last chapter ... Times 10!! I loved it, absolutely amazing. I love how you ended it, perfect. It just sucks that it will be awhile till we can read what comes next! Enjoy your break and hurry back - Please!!!
P.S. Loved it so much I am going to read it again right now :)
LOL WLALB
The End!!!!!!!!!!
But Jaz, I don't want it to be the end.
Your really enjoy the mental ro-sham-bo you practice on us readers, you are so evil.
WLALB = Whining Like A Little Bitch
Wow
So can you give caleb a really big bitch slap so he wakes up make it so annie nearly dies or sumthin
O.M.F.G "You bitch"!
#2 request for Caleb to get the biggest fucking bitchslap EVER please!
WHAT IN THE BLUE HELL!!!!!??????
No the thriple hell you did not just end it this way!!!!!! JAZZ!!! Ok!! Im gonna try to calm down because I just got a head rush when I screamed!!! Whooo!! Ive just come to realize that you are the devil or at least some kind of high level demon spawn from hell!!! Only such a person could torture us like this and find great pleasure in doing so!! Evil woman enjoy your hiatus as we continue to suffer and I look foward to your next story!!
What can I say
You are the Queen...A short Hiatus I hope
*blinks back tears* Wow
i know everyone is beyond pissed with how you left this chapter and about you going on hiatus but i do understand why you ended this as you did, i truly do hope you get well rested on your hiatus because we (Your loyal readers) will be going insane waiting, i do love this chapter! Liam is devastated as all the others but what other choice did they leave Anakatrine, there was none, she warned Caleb and everyone else what would come about but they let their fury get in the way of seeing there was no other choice in the matter...i do know in the next story you will try to make things right but i think it will be difficult to achieve, i do think that Anne will be lost and Anakatrine will remain which is sad because Caleb pushed her into this situation instead of trusting in HIS MATE like his should have...ok enough of my babbling...Excellent chapter hun...
Donna
Wow!
That was one big cliffhanger!!!
Ok, have your break but please write fast when you can.
Superb ending as always.
You never fail to top your stories.
Have a happy vacation! ....but write still ;)
Great stuff
Now we just have to wait for the next story. I do love all in this series. Well, one thing for sure, we'll all be waiting IMPATIENTLY.
You got to be joking, please make it a short hiatus I can't wait to read more. I totally love reading your work and hope you'll be back soon with more. Hope you have a good break
Question
Can Anakatrine make Thereasa a werewolf?
great, never saw it coming
the best way to keep the story fresh, it was still great and I loved reading them. But apart of me still felt that it was getting to perfect i.e very one will find a mate and with the triumvirate guarding and guiding everyone and being happy with there mate. Now the king and queen at odds and the demon in one of the Vârcolac. just great I am even more hooked a will be waiting for the next one, and trying to think of were you are going with this as I do with all the story that I love. Most of the time I am wrong but that makes it even better
Wow!; that's quite the cliffhanger - biggest one by far from you. Quite a powerful ending. Enjoy your down time; we all will be waiting for the next installment.
What a way to end a story. I am just in awe over your writing skills. I loved it and cannot wait for the next installment.
WOW!!!!!!!!!!
That is what I call a cliffhanger. I will be watching for the new series after the hiatus.
Thrilled
I was so happy you posted in such a short time now I'm dying for the next story I feel so much for Annie with her natural empathy she will be hit so hard by this love it!!!!
my goodness
make another story asap... please
GR8
We want more...Tanks,,, sqhead
Wowww ...... I cant wait for more ....
NOOOOOOOOOOO
you think you can still take a break after ending this book here? Ok you still deserve a break but that is besides the point after ending here, how could you? This all started w/a vamp and a frail human girl who was dealing w/the lose of her brother. We have traveled so far and yet we really haven't really, not really. So now like so many others I will await your "break" and still check daily in the hopes that you couldn't turn your brain off and a new chapter has posted. Hey you can't take away all my fantasies...hehe-he
god given talent
this is a pure artist work.,. can't wait on the next stories
Patpricka
This is my second time posting on here and this will be my last. I wish you all the best on your publishing stratch that I KNOW YOU WILL GET PUBLISHED! Your a genius and a phenomenal writer. Normally I get antsy and annoyed with series but you have pulled me into these sagas. I appreciate you and I'll be sure to buy your books when they make it in Barnes and Nobles. Don't let noone deter you because you have a gift and I'm glad you decided to share it with me and others. ~ Cheers to you Jaz and your future endeavors.
Now on to this last chapter. I loved it and I agree with what Anaktrine did I think it was beyond fair. I find it funny that Caleb was going to kill her indefinitly and the others stood up for Liam but he wasn't tested either. That was a bitch and weak move for Caleb. I don't understand the animosity towards Anaktrine she just turned her human and striped her of her powers. Rease didn't die she's still alive basically what Anaktrine did is make her walk a road of redemption which I think is deserving. Rease has to prove that she has grown and a genuine person now instead of causing turmoil for her malice ways and thought process. I just don't understand why everyone is so upset either Rease was going to get death/banishment for her crimes which would have killed Liam and destroyed the structure. This way Rease has a chance to redeam/right her wrong doings so I agree with Anaktrine punishment. Now I just feel for Anna because she is going to be crushed. For Caleb he can go f himself. Caleb is wrong and I have no sympthay to give him espicially since he wanted to KILL Rease and called Anaktrine a bitch for allowing her to REDEAM herself. I also know this has changed the structure of everything and the relationships for Anna towards everybody but for them to fill loathe for her is riduculous. Rease being a human is not a death sentence its redemption and she is not dead or killed which was the other option. I think they should be grateful for the outcome that has so much to gain instead of Rease's permenant death.
Looking forward to the next saga. I'll be waiting.
~ Sincerly Patpricka
Excellent!
Wow, who would have thought that the bonds of fidelity would be so weak between people who seemed so strong? Some of the strongest people who were supposed to love and respect each other and Annie/Anakatrine just turned on her to side with a bigot who attempted to murder their own and was directly responsible for the torture, maiming and near death of Pietro.
Reasa was under sentence of death, their queen gave her the hardest, yet kindest judgement she could in the circumstances – Reasa deserved the punishment she received, if they cannot see it, there is no hope for any of them. Those attacking the Vârcolac needed to know that there would be consequences for their attacks (and Reasa now has the opportunity to try to make amends, if that is even possible). I believe that even Liam should see this (I really disliked his spiteful reaction at the end, it seemed very out of character).
As for Caleb? Wow, some soulmate he turned out to be. Annie/Anakatrine deserves far more trust and loyalty from her people, especially from the one who is supposed to love her above all else.
I really hope that Jaz doesn't cast Liam as some sort of revenge seeking villain (which would be ridiculous, he is supposed to be a powerful empathic, if anyone on the planet would understand, it would be him - even if he didn't like it) he’d be better served trying to educate Reasa out of her bigoted ignorance.
Well done Jaz, I look forward to more…
three things,
and the y re simple, Caleb/callain are not one, so while annie/ankatrinna ( i know i might be misspelling , but the idea is sound) are, so they will not ever see eye to eye anymore, the second, there might just be another who is as powerful mentally as Annie, Liam , as he just proved, and the final, , reasa may no longer be a vampire, but who is to say see no longer has her empath abilities, so in closing, kick ass story, and i cannot await the next "book" of it
joe catanese( catman71)
WOW!!!!!!!
I can't believe you ended it like that. I hope your hiatus isn't that long cause I'm itching to finish this story. That was a MASSIVE cliffhanger. I'll be on pins & needles till you post again
Now you're pulling Steven Kings stunts.
Annakatrine was barely mentioned and never fleshed out, and suddenly she appears to met out "justice" and show that her limitless powers allow her to bring back to human. As Caleb stated "When had she become this powerful?". I asked myself the same question. This reminds me of Steven King stories like The Stand, where at the climactic moment of good versus evil the hand of God suddenly appears out of nowhere to detonate the bomb and met out justice to the wicked. I just finished reading his book Duma Key and he did the same thing at around page 577. I appreciate that you are spending time getting your work published, but not taking the time to build up to Annakatrine's power is lazy writing and not up to your skills. King can get away with this, but you need to prove yourself outside of this small (but enthusiastic) Literotica group. Good luck on your publishing pursuits.
Yves
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