At Last

Good story, room for more here I think.

Good Build up

Way to get us right there and leave us hanging. Keep going with this story. It has real potential

Teasing

but okay so far. We'll wait and see if it goes anywhere.

Ugh

Thrown where you wanted throne, your where you wanted you're. A number of others. Misplaced capitals. Punctuation in the middle of sentences. SHE COMMANDED. Seriously, the idea is convert your thoughts to sentences that communicate those thoughts to the reader so that they understand what is in your head. Not to literally write the thoughts as they occur.

Please work harder

Please continue...

I loved the thought process you shared. I am very turned on and anxious to learn more about Galen!

Thank you

I will try to build on this story as time permits. I am a novice and just want to get this out for everyone's enjoyment. Please forgive or overlook my errors, I am a novice after all. I will try to do better with this though. A few mistakes were pointed out that I was not aware of. I do hope the general them and story content were enjoyed.
Thanks again

Loving it!

For most of us cuckolds, it is the submission we crave and your story builds on that need very well. Can't wait for more!

Thoughts

The theme of this story is well developed but the delivery can be improved to make the reading easier and more fluid. These comments are not made to discourage your writing more on this topic or about this incident but, rather, to encourage you to bring your story-telling skills to as polished a point as your understanding of the elements of this story. The hard conceptual part of writing, the idea upon which you wish to expound, seems not to be your challenge; it is in the delivery and I encourage you to grow in that manner.

Congratulations!!!

Excellent story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Next chapter, please... ;)

Wheres the next chapter?

Dont leave us in the lurch. Write more please.

Chapter two is coming soon

I am having trouble with my editing. I have a good chapter coming soon and more to come. please be patient

very good story. I gave it 5 stars. For the trolls I would have to say that until you have been married 15-25 years to the same woman please do not judge. Sex can be very dull. I am not a cuck and I get no sex simply because I could care less. If my wife would play games like the wife in the story I would really be interested in her again. Good show and keep writing.

Soon to be cuckold

She is laying out her rules. He has accepted. But the rules come one at a time, slow, as she thinks of them. Also if her cuckold cannot control himself, he needs to be in chastity bad. Milking his balls dry once a month as she uses a toy in his ass.