This story is in four chapters. The story is finished and all chapters have been submitted and hopefully a chapter will be posted each day. Hope you stay with me on this one.
Best Regards
DG Hear
All of your stories are enjoyable and thought-provoking. Personally I would get as far away from Jenny as possible, but then I was always an employee and never an owner. This probably gives Jeff more self-confidence. I do hope that he will request a pre-nup if they marry....
A really good start, with clearly defined people, looking forward to the rest. As always I enjoy your writing, an easy style and nothing hidden unless it has to be.
This author is a master of ' appearing' to be artless!
Yet after this start , all the core elements of the story are in place. We know the characters & the purposefully loose plot thread is the narrator's new girlfriend " used to have a substance abuse problem. D.G. makes this look easy. Well it isn't . Believe me, I've tried.
Very good start to a story. But we learn she is or 'was' a 'wild child'. It is usually not a good idea to get serious about a 'wild child'. It usually comes back to bite you. Can't wait to be proven wrong. You are one of my favorite romance writers. Thank You.
After reading this chapter I understand the author's doubts about which section should publish the story. True, it begins as typical erotic couples, but quickly Jeff begins to look at her differently, albeit with his doubts about Jen's sexual experience. I like John's frankness, he does not bite his tongue and he knows his daughter very well.
We will see what happens in the following chapters.
5 * for you.
I apologize for my English (yet and forever), isn't my native language.
English
DG Hear
This story is in four chapters. The story is finished and all chapters have been submitted and hopefully a chapter will be posted each day. Hope you stay with me on this one.
Best Regards
DG Hear
Very Good, so far
All of your stories are enjoyable and thought-provoking. Personally I would get as far away from Jenny as possible, but then I was always an employee and never an owner. This probably gives Jeff more self-confidence. I do hope that he will request a pre-nup if they marry....
Good Start
And...,you've found a good editor.
very good
very good intreging cant wait to read more
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Great Start!
I look forward to reading the rest of the story.
An Excellent start.
A really good start, with clearly defined people, looking forward to the rest. As always I enjoy your writing, an easy style and nothing hidden unless it has to be.
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I am curious DGH can write a "wrong" story?
A bit of a slow start...
... but you got 4 stars on reputation alone. Jeff does seem to be a better protaganist than some of your recent ones.
This author is a master of ' appearing' to be artless!
Yet after this start , all the core elements of the story are in place. We know the characters & the purposefully loose plot thread is the narrator's new girlfriend " used to have a substance abuse problem. D.G. makes this look easy. Well it isn't . Believe me, I've tried.
Enjoyed it
thanks for the offering.
Uh Oh!
Very good start to a story. But we learn she is or 'was' a 'wild child'. It is usually not a good idea to get serious about a 'wild child'. It usually comes back to bite you. Can't wait to be proven wrong. You are one of my favorite romance writers. Thank You.
An interesting beginning of a story
After reading this chapter I understand the author's doubts about which section should publish the story. True, it begins as typical erotic couples, but quickly Jeff begins to look at her differently, albeit with his doubts about Jen's sexual experience. I like John's frankness, he does not bite his tongue and he knows his daughter very well.
We will see what happens in the following chapters.
5 * for you.
I apologize for my English (yet and forever), isn't my native language.
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