Lickideesplit asked a question that I had also wondered aboud
"were Carlton's 'donations' restricted to one or two during Sweetie's peak fertile periods the three pregnancy times?" If so, it could have affected Harold's decisions about divorce.
It finally dawned on me that we know that the two continued their affair for years because Harold never fathered a fourth child. She was probably using contraception after she had the three children she wanted. Since she thought that Harold was infertile, she would only do that because she was still sleeping with someone else.
well been going through the archives today and ran across this lil gem. Loved it !
Couldn't get a read on his father though, first he ingrains his son with never putting up with a cheating spouse, then tries to do just that !
But this type of story isn't to be thought out too much, it is a BTB special ! hold the pickles please ! lol chuckle
5*'s squared !
As for his parents, the father in particular, why ingrained him about how to deal with cheating wives to go back on it? The wife was a slut pure and simple. If she knew he was sterile why not talk to him about it and get in vitro? As for the parents believing that he was sterile, didn't they think he needed to know. Did his wife ever even apologize? Thought not. Story is far fetched, but if already written why not sue the wife and both sets of parents for fraud or at the least alienation of affection?
One last thing, did anyone from this screwed up situation ever apologize? Didn't think so. A sequel while not necessary would be nice if only to see what they all had to say for themselves.
I love these BTB stories - but the dialogue was stilted and in the majority of the story, non-existent. You described what was said instead of allowing your characters to say it
English
Editing!
Editing is atrocious.
Lickideesplit asked a question that I had also wondered aboud
"were Carlton's 'donations' restricted to one or two during Sweetie's peak fertile periods the three pregnancy times?" If so, it could have affected Harold's decisions about divorce.
It finally dawned on me that we know that the two continued their affair for years because Harold never fathered a fourth child. She was probably using contraception after she had the three children she wanted. Since she thought that Harold was infertile, she would only do that because she was still sleeping with someone else.
2nd reading
needed to read this again. Present stories are just same-o same-o.
Good one to clense the palate !
well been going through the archives today and ran across this lil gem. Loved it !
Couldn't get a read on his father though, first he ingrains his son with never putting up with a cheating spouse, then tries to do just that !
But this type of story isn't to be thought out too much, it is a BTB special ! hold the pickles please ! lol chuckle
5*'s squared !
Accidentally gave it a three and can't change it
As for his parents, the father in particular, why ingrained him about how to deal with cheating wives to go back on it? The wife was a slut pure and simple. If she knew he was sterile why not talk to him about it and get in vitro? As for the parents believing that he was sterile, didn't they think he needed to know. Did his wife ever even apologize? Thought not. Story is far fetched, but if already written why not sue the wife and both sets of parents for fraud or at the least alienation of affection?
One last thing, did anyone from this screwed up situation ever apologize? Didn't think so. A sequel while not necessary would be nice if only to see what they all had to say for themselves.
Damn
The last two comments say it all. What a fucked up family. At least our betrayed hero had a happy ending.
LIFE IS HARD
more-so if you happen to weaken. TK U MLJ LV NV
*****
Came back for a reread or a read of a reread or a....
Anyway, awesome but a bit short. Needs some further expansion.
Still a 5* though.
Get an editor
Really hard reading; YOU seriously need a good editor to clean up the poor spelling & grammar; then it might be a fairly good story
Great premise - poor writing
I love these BTB stories - but the dialogue was stilted and in the majority of the story, non-existent. You described what was said instead of allowing your characters to say it
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