All Comments on 'Winter's Day'

I think you should read some real writing (and take notes) before you try writing again. Maybe take an English class. This is too jumbled to make sense. If you were trying to picture a series of short scenes it is better done in a different way.

You confuse the 'yours', 'tos', and 'theirs'. All of them have three different forms. Two pieces of bread with a filling in between is a 'sandwich', not a 'sand which'.

If nothing else find an editor.

Please write more about this or a new one like this