by likegoodwine
Nicely creative... Though he should have told her about the semen encrusted panties!
Before Jim Carrey commissions a film script from this story.Its been awhile beteen hit movies for him & Jim's desperate. This could be a scene from the sequel to the sequel of " Dumb & Dumber".
What a great parody! Those saying it is horrible haven't read the genre, because this one covers it all, the husbands who always seem to be ex agents or military, the wife dumb enough to leave signs of her cheating, the not having sex, the bitch sister, the car ( a pinto? I love it, especially if you consider that in homage to SS06, the Mustang II was a rebadged pinto)...and the ending is hysterical, too, besides the ineptness of the husband, the 'twist ending' that doesn't look much like a twist, that wife was really planning a gift for him *lol*.....this reminds me a lot of the old "schlock Homes" parodies of Dick Trout, thank you!
even if it was a parody. I noticed that one of the first four commentators didn't read your preface or doesn't know what a parody is.
The LW category should be split up "in partes tres" - one for revenge, one for cuckold, and one for others where sexual relations between a married couple goes off the tracks. That way a reader such as I could find the occasional story with a plot worth reading without having to slog through countless repetitions of cuckoldry and unlikely mayhem
I enjoyed the story and had a few laugh and I still smile at the cookies he is eating.
hurt yourself more than others TK U MLJ LV NV
Yes the Mexican warehouse was funny, but the Law and hor duvre and the wild goose chase had me laughing a long time. I love pate de fois gras and knew about California forbidding it. Great story!
Nicely done! Quite the Burn the Bitch Story. Enjoyed it Alot!
You should produce a series on Showtime. We could call it "What The Fuck."
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re: anon, the ban applied only to the city IIRC.
Excellent gag lines everywhere in this little gem of a story, well above the comprehension level of those it ridicules (see previous comment for proof....)
HDK and the other wits around here would be proud. 5*
and yes, far above the comprehension level of those it makes fun of. truly a 5 :) effort
i cried laughing! brilliant! much longer story of the same genre would be most welcome.
What can I say? As others have said, you have covered all that can be said about the genre. Keep them coming!
It is said that "Fiction is always stranger than truth" and this story shows it. Pinto that floods and all.
closet cucks cannot distinguish reality from fantasy.
I can just picture this moron with his MAGA baseball cap on as he downs some more opiods.
... of the rest of this very far reaches for puns and idea puns that most of this story takes. It was ugh, uh, ugh, then “mexican warehouse” — then LOL
So many grammatical errors I don't know where to start, but that's where you need to start. As far as content you need a strong editor to point out the holes.
He has trouble thinking and breathing at the same time. Maybe his mother SHOULD have swallowed.
I'm not sure if she cheated, but not allowed to have sex with her for months is a strong indicator but of course no proof.
That’s it. Make fun of something, that is a horrible and life changing event for most people. One star.
I thought it was funny. Alot of misses to be sure, and better explanation for what was going on may have been nice... I think this could be a big win with a rewrite.