This story had great potential. Unfortunately whatever possible good material here was drowned in bad spelling and grammatical errors. Edit!
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Anonymous11/12/12
Great story
I loved the story, has a great sense of realism and doesn't rely on extremist weirdness to impress a reader. I didn't really have an issue with the editing although I know some do. My advice, however, is that if your story is going to be carried by the relationship of it's characters then we need to get to know them: not cup or cock size but personality, motivation, concerns, etc.
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Needs an Editor
This story had great potential. Unfortunately whatever possible good material here was drowned in bad spelling and grammatical errors. Edit!
Great story
I loved the story, has a great sense of realism and doesn't rely on extremist weirdness to impress a reader. I didn't really have an issue with the editing although I know some do. My advice, however, is that if your story is going to be carried by the relationship of it's characters then we need to get to know them: not cup or cock size but personality, motivation, concerns, etc.
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