All Comments on 'Business with Pleasure'

should ALWAYS by in Capitals!!

Not just at the start of a sentence!!

Focus on grammar next time,read over work,that sometimes helps.The tone of the story sounded more like bragging and boastfull manner than sexual and erotic.

Thanks for the feedback. Wrote the story in a hurry and yes didn't read it before submitting. Will surely try to improve next time.

but it is also pretty apparent that English is not your first language either. Next time proof it before putting it on the site.

Could have been a really good story but the grammar problems were overwhelming.

"...she too good late..."

WTH is that?!