So Brandon's girl friend works at a law firm and he's about to give that up for a culinary student? You've got to be kidding me right? Check out some of the well written stories, re-write this one...
You are all over the place with tenses and then you keep switching first person and third person. Good story idea but you need and editor:)
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So Brandon's girl friend works at a law firm and he's about to give that up for a culinary student? You've got to be kidding me right?
Check out some of the well written stories, re-write this one...
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You are all over the place with tenses and then you keep switching first person and third person. Good story idea but you need and editor:)
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