All Comments on 'A Food Affair'

by justboycrazy

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AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago

So Brandon's girl friend works at a law firm and he's about to give that up for a culinary student? You've got to be kidding me right?

Check out some of the well written stories, re-write this one...

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Grammar

You are all over the place with tenses and then you keep switching first person and third person. Good story idea but you need and editor:)

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