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Heartbreaking
Breathtaking – the way one sees on a crystal clear winter's day. Perfectly beautiful. Well done, Scotsman. Stunningly well done.
Heartbreaking indeed.
This is far from technically perfect, but does it convey the desolation of a love lost!
An odd mix of artists
Having read and re-read your poem, I'm still not sure why you choose to mix Beethoven, two French impressionists and a modern Russian composer. The rest of the verse doesn't really seem to reflect any of their work, but I may be missing something? Were you selecting names at random or just using them as icons of culture? Some more precise associations might have improved the poetic metaphor, but I may be nit picking. Whatever.
SweetOblivion,
the composers and artists named are amongst those two human beings once shared. That's all.
Elegant testimony...
...to a time before dreams and hearts were broken..
BUT WHO KNOWS
what the future may unfold, TK U MLJ LV NV
tazz,
there's no future any more.
I know the feeling
It resonates, but I don't think the last seven words fit the rest.
lovely and haunting
It's a beautiful tribute to a connection lost... thanks for sharing. You convey so much with such an economy of words!
This resonates with me
There is much beauty and melancholy in the apparent simplicity of this poem.It conveys so much about what happens to relationships.It certainly resonates with my life experience.You express where so many of us have been in such a moving way.
Complete
shite.
The Feels
I must disagree with some of the other comments here, for me, poetry is about feeling. It is not a science and so technical accuracy is second place to the emotion, sentiment and sense of nostalgia a poem creates (or doesn't)
I was constantly driving my English lit lecturer mad with this sort of talk, but for me at least, that is where the truth of a poem lies.
And this poem does well to create that sense of nostalgia for a time long past. It conveys well the emotion felt once, lost and longed for again. Is it technically perfect? No. Does it matter? No.
I enjoyed it. Thank you.
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