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FD45FD45over 11 years ago
I hate going first but blame it on the time zones

Technical Skill: Hmm. Either my eyes are not what they once were, I've gotten used to the Stang's errors or he's improved in quality. I didn't see a LOT of misplaced commas, and even noted a couple missing ones, but as I said, I didn't notice for SOME reason.

Plot: So...this guy who is REALLY successful marries a whore and loves her with all his heart and SHE also loves him with all HER heart...but she still cheats and rips both of their hearts apart and she never gets over it, while he can't step outside his door without tripping over a woman who is hotter and truer. That plot seems...familiar somehow...I don't mind if you keep writing the same story with the same characters, but don't be upset if people call you on that. Whatever happened to "Cancer" or "Butt Dial Breakup"? Their were SOME blatant similarities, but in the first, I thought the motive of the woman to cheat was MUCH better and in the second, the fact that green green grass was rarer than anticipated made the story seem quite real. It could be you did a better variation on the theme or maybe I was still new to Stang so it still seemed bright an new.

Versimilitude: Guys didn't recognize a BB gun? Really? And there is a term for what Ben and Mel engaged in: it's called an emotional affair. But God forbid we imply that Ben isn't a moral paragon who would ever short his wife in ANY way. Because guys can spend HOURS chatting with strange women and spend money on them without harming his primary relationship...(THAT would have been a motive and a story to sink one's teeth into) I can understand why a woman would cheat, particularly with a Beta Male like Ben. But I can't understand her gangbanging half the neighbors or allowing STRANGERS to come and fuck her. I really wish I could meet a cheating wife whose motives I understand (see Cancer, The Love Boat, Curiosity)

Likability: It was a breezy romp. I liked the extra dimensions by adding Tabitha. But even a scoundral wouldn't call himself "style over substance'. He'd say appearances are incredibly important.

Except for the repetition and the motive, most of the comments are quibbles. The other...well, it's like a Michael Bay film. You're going to get Boobs and 'Splosions so what did you think going in, you'd get Meryl Streep? You know what you're getting every time with a Stang story...and the people seem to like it. I keep coming back.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
A breath of fresh air

I disagree with FD45 I really liked the story. He told us in the beginning that there might not be any likeable characters here. This is one of those stories that you have to think about. I think the story was about levels of cheating. is it wrong to sit on a computer and chat with a person for a months when you could be spending that time and energy on your marriage or is it more wrong to actually go out and screw someone outside of your marriage. Then there's the guy who thinks his wife is boring so he goes out and fucks his best friends wife. The woman who gets boinked behind the supermarket was funnny. The trailer couple were the biggest tragedy though because at first I thought he was an asshole especially after he hit her. I think it was a great story and one that I'll think about for a long time. the problem is that a lot of us including me come here for a porn story something quick and sexy I admit that i read the first few pages and then went and read other stories and came back to this one after I got my sex fix but of all the stories I read this one is probably the best

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago

FD45, you might want to edit your own comments before passing judgement on Stangstar's, you used THEIR instead of there. I really don't think you needed a comment that was almost as long winded as Stangstar's story.

sengimaxsengimaxover 11 years ago
Great as Usual

Always a good read. I look forward to your stories they make my week. Always entertaining, with a twist, you are a natural story teller.

Many Thanks

cueball961cueball961over 11 years ago
Great, As Usual

Five stars. Need I say more?

dinkymacdinkymacover 11 years ago
Great!!!

Thanks for a great read!

bruce22bruce22over 11 years ago
Really it was not enjoyable, for me.

I guess I prefer to like the characters. Using the same phrases and doing the same dance steps over and over again causes causes my attention to wander, or perhaps I am just in a bad mood!

DunaDunaover 11 years ago
SS06 explains well Sandy's nature!

@ FD45 I stopped at the begining of the 3d pages and the Author explains well Sandy became a nympho. A nympho could cover her nature for some years. If the husband is lucky he guess befor children birth.

I think our critics for sexual majority husband character using writer MUST (not should) BE FRIENDLY, because there were more days, when sexual majority character using story was not published here. I think more sexual majority husband story Authors was chased from here for the not too friendly critics and the offenders.

The first name is whom I remeber BeerMaker, who complained in his selfcomment for the offenders.

BTW I carry on reading, because this story will be interesting.

Danger09Danger09over 11 years ago
OMG ---I fucking loved it !!!!!....

It was so worth the two week wait! I couldn't stop reading, I actually loved Ben & Melanie , the only ones I really didn't care for was Ryan , gutter slut sandy, & the 4 guys sandy the cum slut was fucking. Wow this story was a bit different from your other stories --- but it was good different, this story had a brain dead slut wife & a brain dead husband who was lazy, stupid & greedy. The story had me LMAO ; ) Ok something sandy said that really irked me a bit was "if I thought for a second that this would jeopardize my marriage to Ben I'd drop"em like a hot potato --here's the thing, I've read this same line over a hundreds time in the LW category & I always get a little peeved ( I don't know why..... I have a very low tolerance for stupidity) . That's the most dumbest shit I've ever heard, I mean really; did she expect Ben to just say; oh, its ok honey, you couldn't of possibly have anticipated that I'd divorce your dirty ass when I found you getting fuck'd by four men; two of whom were my friends. I thought it was freaking hilarious when sandy asked nick to lick her pussy... Ha! This bitch must have an I.Q of a mushroom, why would she assume that any man would put his lips on her swampy pussy?! Lords knows what's crawling in there; although I'm kinda of confused as to why nick & Greg refused to eat her pussy but didn't mind fucking her bare?!--- sandy misrepresented her self when she married Ben, she was whore the day they met, she had no business starting a relationship & getting married. I never will understand women like sandy, here she never had a man who truly loved & cared for her, who didn't treat her like the round heel cheap whore that she really is & yet that wasn't enough for her, she intentionally shitted on him, & I don't exactly understand her reasoning for doing it, she gets one shitty orgasm & then gets ready for her husband to supply him with as much sloppy pussy he can handle. I don't understand why ?! She's been cheating on the poor bastard for a year or more, she's slept with thousands of guys , I don't get why she did it... She claims they just prepare her for her husband but if Ben really turn her on like she said she wouldn't of needed to fuck the neighbors . I think she's just a fucking slut, she can try to rationalize or justify it any way she pleases but it still equals "gutter slut". I didn't notice in the story where sandy had a job, maybe this was the problem, she had way too much time on her hands, if she had a job she would be too tired to fuck four men at once... The bitch was lazy, I think her & Ryan would be perfect for each other .. I usually don't condone cheating regardless of the situation but this story has me contradicting myself in regards to Melanie & Ben, Ben'd wife was born a lazy slut, Melanie's husband was a fucking scum bag who deserved getting his dick cutoff, I don't know why anyone would marry an individual for money & prestige; so technically Ryan committed a fraud by marrying Melanie & sandy committed a fraud by marrying Ben because she was a whore when she met him & she continued to be so with thousands of different men ; so therefore the marriage contract became void. I don't know what the fuck that stupid bitch tabby was going through but the bitch needed to step back & wooh-sa, because she's been cheating on her husband for years yet she's agitated that he's fucking her cousin ( although that was gross) but they both were cheaters, she even threw the fact that some of the kids weren't his--shit I'd slap the taste buds out that bitch mouth too ( I don't condone this either) someone women just aren't happy with what they have, they don't appreciate their spouse, they don't know what they want, she tried to get a replacement husband by spreading that cesspool she calls a twat around town, thinking her shit is made of platinum. I hope tabby's husband dump her sorry ass. Everybody in this story was in fact a cheater. I soooooooooo love this story, I'm still laughing. Oh, I don't understand why sandy cracked Greg's head open? What did he say to make her snap? I don't get why Betty is still friends with sandy when sandy's been fucking & sucking her husband for a year possibly more? Sandy don't know the definition of friendship & the bitch knows jack shit about marriage. I have to say I enjoyed the hotel scene with Ryan tied up & Melanie getting some good dick, I usually can't stand women who tie up their husbands & make them watch them fucking some dude but in this was different, she demanded a divorce & he refused, she told him she wanted to get fuck'd; she never told Ryan he'd be the one fucking her, that just goes to show Ryan only thinks with his dick. I so can't wait for next weeks. I loved loved loved this story

ythebadgerythebadgerover 11 years ago
I just couldn't identify

any of the characters as 'real' people, somehow. It wasn't a bad story - not by any means, but there was a lot of LW formula within it.

cpetecpeteover 11 years ago
4 stories in 1!

Bonus! Four great stories with interwinding plots! Well done. How you managed the large number of charaters and their interations was first rate. A really fine read

And thanks for the shout out

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Echoing Cpete and Danger09...

I fucking loved it! 4 stories in one....Yes!

OldMarineVet Ron Wood

longrifle308longrifle308over 11 years ago
too long

belongs in the novel section. I won't read anything more than 6 pages.

tazz317tazz317over 11 years ago
HIGHER MATHEMATICS IS DIFFICULT TO UNDERSTAND

but to comprehend arithmatic by rote makes for practice, TK U MLJ LV NV

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
zero

that was not even a story. just pure filth. you really live in a great world but I don't want even the best part of it. if you would be able to explain what should be erotic about this shit would be president of the US. but you are not.

cirkarncirkarnover 11 years ago
First for me

Hmmm, interesting this is the first time I have read about a guy watching his wife getting screwed and not having my stomach roll over like it does when I pick the wrong kind of loving wife story. I have enjoyed most of your stories and adored some. Still haven't entirely figured out why you put your Mustangs away for the winter, unless it is to protect them from rust. As far as snow, sure they slip but that just means you do all kinds of slick driving, lol, though don't get carried away. One time I was fooling around as I made a turn and slid up sideways up right up to a gas pump. I got out and fueled up like I meant to do that, lol, but I bet my eyes were probably as big as the gas attendant's eyes as I slid toward the gas station. Anyway, how about someone driving in the winter and having some fun?

Sidney43Sidney43over 11 years ago

"Please don't," I said. "You're too pretty to have yourself marked up."

Yeah, you got that right for sure. Can't figure out why beautiful women with lovely skin want to ruin it with tats and then think everyone should ooh and aah over them????

Pretty good story, but kind of a theme we have read before. I did like the several references to it being against the law to lie on the Internet and the line about a woman knowing instantly if there was a chance they would have sex was good too.

DunaDunaover 11 years ago
Ha Ha Ha

"Guys like C-Pete, HueDogg, Rehnquist and DQS1 know these things inside and out."

Not only Harry In Va and me were mentioned in a SS06 story.

Tomorow I will carry on reading.

FD45FD45over 11 years ago
I should give a shout out

to the fact that there WERE multiple and interrelated stories. I understood Tabitha. I did. She had poor but valid motives. Do I think she'll be alone forever....probably, but that is a function of her kids and not her appearance.

Most women find someone else, but the whistfulness of 'The One That Got Away' (if THEY did not pull the trigger) grates the soul.

Ryan was just a cardboard cut out, though I found the lawyer amusing.

The best part of the story was when the neighbor came over and her reflection held a mirror to the Ben's wife which was an ugly ugly image. I can see the wife of a ONS feeling that way (by the time you reach Sandy's level, the rationalization equipment is already on and going Warp 10) but it was a nice tool to shake her out of her idiocy.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
THE BABE HITS A FOUR BAGGER

So good to read a rock solid StangStar06 story again. As usual you took us on a trip and made the ride enjoyable.

DunaDunaover 11 years ago
5 stars

What about clishes: Cervantes used the knight novel clishes and he wrote an excellent......Swift used the utopia and adventurous sea story clishes and he wrote an excellent.....Dickens used the cardbox characters and he wrote..........

Clishes and cardbox, but we readers got a humorouse story I am sorry, because we got 4 humorous stories.

SLOgentSLOgentover 11 years ago
Welcome Back

Now THIS is the SS06 I have come to enjoy and admire. Forget the crazy shit of the past few weeks. It is beneath you.

TwosheddzTwosheddzover 11 years ago
Tip of the Hat

Another well crafted story. I just about shit when I clicked on the page dropdown and saw 12 effin' pages. Loved every one of them. Bravo.

stinger82stinger82over 11 years ago
Laughed when I read ..........

Nick hated tuna.

Classic!

I loved it (and the whole story) although I'd like to have seen Joe Bob come out a bit better at the end.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Oh God!

12 pages to ditch the wife? I'll vote after reading this.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
12 pages of cucking and cream pies?

No thanks.

dustydingodustydingoover 11 years ago
Well........

Your a great author.

Enjoyed it , but I personally don't think it was one of your best.

I lked the theme but to me something was missing. ...And I can't think what is missing, so maybe I'm just expecting too much perfection from a perfect author.

user110user110over 11 years ago
missing... something?

well, it doesnt seem quite like you phoned this one in, but there's no emotion in any of the 12 pages.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Bit sanctimonious this one

The "heroes" we're already cheaters they just hadn't slept together. Emotional cheating for a year is just as bad as " it's just sex" cheaters.

So no innocents and if anything I felt for Sandy more than any of them. Treated badly, sorted her shit out, slipped, realized the "mistake" and planned to end it, why just once more, and get back on track. Only to have another dickhead keep the pressure on.

Ultimately unsatisfying read - but appreciate the effort, it's more than I could do:-)

TheAnonYmousTheAnonYmousover 11 years ago
Bland and insipid..

why write a story when you have nothing new to write about..all of your recent stories have been more or less sharing the the same cheesy plot..you used to be a good and original story teller but recently something seems to have changed....dressing up a dud with snazzy catch phrases, one-liners and corny dialogue doesn't a story make..you need to take a long break and recharge your creative juices

hawkeye0007hawkeye0007over 11 years ago
Good Story

Mustang man, please ignore the anonymouse assholes that read your stories and then slam them. Most of us like most of your stories. Keep em coming.

jeeter4ujeeter4uover 11 years ago
Page 9

I have jumped to the end to suggest you check out page nine. I don't know if it can be straightened out now or not but it definitely needs help. Given that I suffer from what is known in polite company as brain flatus, I had to comment swiftly! now, back to the story.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
confusing

this was confusing but i still liked it very much

karan9876karan9876over 11 years ago
5 stars.

I gave it 5 Stars, need I say more?

frontlinecasterfrontlinecasterover 11 years ago

Very well written, I liked the intersecting stories and different viewpoints, and nice to see you have the cheating guy's perspective included. Five Stars.

cantbuymycantbuymyover 11 years ago

the master of the stupid wife, combined with a stupid husband, is back. a lot of fun. 5

dbdukedbdukeover 11 years ago
Only One Word

"OUTSTANDING"!!!!!

thefranzthefranzover 11 years ago
The next step in your storytelling

Of course there are SS06's trademark "stupid cheating partners" but the multiple viewpoints were done very well and blended seamlessly. You are surely getting better. A great read.

trashmantxtrashmantxover 11 years ago
Five *'s as always

Stupid Ryan

BelgiumBelgiumover 11 years ago
Variations on a theme

Some good, some bad but all in all variations on a theme. It seems to me that SS06 – although a great writer – is starting to repeat himself. I thus like it when he treads on new ground and changes to other themes, for instance more romantic or other types of story content like the woman being the innocent party in stead of the cheater. This one however is one of the same old mold. But it’s when you leave your standard repertoire of the standard cheating wife/clueless husband that you wrote some of your greatest stories. So keep expanding your horizon! With this I’m not saying it wasn’t good – no SS06 story can be called bad or even mediocre – but it’s not one of your greatest hits.

I thus disagree with Duna and I think that was a faulty comparison. There is a big difference between an author writing a cliché story (Cervantes in the analogy) or one who follows a generally/socially accepted theme, and an author who keeps repeating himself and his own stories. Cervantes, Swift didn’t keep copying the content of their own stories to write new ones. While plagiarism might be the the highest form of flattery, self-plagiarism isn’t.

As to this story I humbly think SS06 should have limited it to the two main story lines and four viewpoints which were excellent. The Tabitha and Joe Bob storyline though was not necessary to the overall story and reads pretty much as an intercalated afterthought. You didn’t flesh out that storyline and it clearly suffers from it. Perhaps it was originally meant to be stand alone/separate story which you didn’t completed but recycled here? It had lots of potential to be an autonomous story but now it seems to be somewhat of a dud.

I agree with Sidney43 as in the fact I too don’t understand why men or women want to automutilate by having ink permanently needled into their skin… and off course later often comes the regret and you’re stuck with it. Plus, depending of the size of the tattoo, society immediately classifies someone with big tattoo’s as a lower class person.

hawkeye0007hawkeye0007over 11 years ago
No One To like

Mustang man, you were correct when you said there is no one to like in this story. Personally, I like to identify with the main character. This story was hard to read.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
GOOD READ

GOOD READ

hoosier76hoosier76over 11 years ago

While at first I had a hard time going from one person/circumstance, I easily adapted to the flow because of your writing ability. I disagree with an earlier comment though, I liked and (if you will) was routing for the right things to happen to Melanie and Ben.

Thanks

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
DUNA ... the difference between YOU and Harryin VA is that

Harry's posts and analysis are never the same. I had been reading Harry's reviews and feedback for a couple of years and honestly ...I have no idea what he is going to say about ANY story. From my point of view the guy is totally unpredictable and it is that aspect of him which is what makes his reviews somewhat different . Even though sometimes his e spelling is atrocious (and one could make the case that the guy is bipolar) Harryin VA brings something new to the table almost every time he posts in the feedback section . And I think for that reason there are often a lot of comments about Harry's comments.

YOU on the other... are predictable dull and boring. Often I fall asleep reading your feedback/ reviews. And if you bother to take a look around you would see that very few people actually end up talking about any sort of feedback / review that YOU ..Duna... has ever posted.

DunaDunaover 11 years ago
To read it is not obligatory

@ Dear Anon I write my comments for my pleasure and if you feels like boring DO NOT READ!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

rcrmonte3rcrmonte3over 11 years ago
Another Good One

As usual, Stang, this is a good, well-developed story. Good plot and another happy(/) ending--at least for 2 people. 2 things--Melanie turned into Sandy once during that first "naked dinner", and I'll email you about the other.

maxx308maxx308over 11 years ago
Fantastic story

Thanks for sharing SS06, your stories are always a pleasure to read.

OLDEDOLDEDover 11 years ago
Nobody

Forces anyone to read any story written here.

If you have a comment---Good---OR---Bad.

At least have the courage to sign your name.

Good story, Fun read

Thanks

ED

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Seriously Bad People

A lot of seriously bad people and probably the worst is Ben

He had been betraying emotionally long before his wife betrayed physically

RhomanovRhomanovabout 11 years ago
Difficult read

I ended up skipping chapters first read as this story wandered all over the place. I did reread fully and found it disjointed.

Characters changed emotionally with little to no reason development behind them. I needed a roster to keep track of who was who based on character development as it did not align to their names or proposed roles.

Could have been a good story.

TavadelphinTavadelphinabout 11 years ago
Good math works -

It did this time -

As always a good story with an important point to take away with you -

A couple of places where the names got confused - the one noted earlier about Melanie and Sandy and a spot where Ben turned into Ryan - but that happens.

The rambling comment has some validity but is not so much a problem as the device you used to tell the story from multiple angles so similar ground was re=walked to show the alternate perspectives - I happened to like it that way.

More is always wanted from you and thank you for all you have given us -

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago

Hey Olded, is that really you're name? You're just as anonymous as the rest of us. If SS06 doesn't want anon comments he doesn't have to allow them.

tazz317tazz317over 10 years ago
#2 WHEN DOING MATHEMATICS

never forget the carry-overs. TK U MLJ LV NV

jezzazjezzazover 10 years ago

Dude, your stuff is awesome.

How do you have the discipline to churn it out so much?

javmor79javmor79over 10 years ago
Best.......Story........Ever!!!!!!

Great story. I loved every page. It was worth the long read!!!!

Drbeamer3333Drbeamer3333about 10 years ago
Enjoyed it

The actions of Melanie and Ben with Ryan seemed very out of character. Thanks for the offering.

saratusaratuabout 10 years ago
I didn't like it.

Usually I enjoy your writing, but when they get drug out as much as this one, it just gets uninteresting in a hurry. 1* or less.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
I really REALLY enjoyed this story....

....right up until Melanie had sex with Ben against his wishes and I was terribly disappointed when she handcuffed her husband and made him watch her with Ben. A new relationship shouldn't start off with an 'ex' watching his ex-wife making true love with her new man. That was just wrong.

But until then, I really enjoyed the story!

As a side note to piss off Stang and all his car washing and waxing, I have washed my truck once in the past 12 years.....heh.....

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago
Liked it alot

Great story !

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago
yugos are better, than ford trucks,

cause they ain't assembled in MEXICO, same as crappy bow tie trucks.

next up...made in china.

OH, liked the story tale very mucho

xtchrxtchrover 9 years ago
I Don't Know...

I don't really know why but I liked this story. Bad people lost, good people won. It was a little simplistic but it was a fun read. By the by, did anyone notice Tabatha's line, "...I'd been in love with Joe Bob since my fifth year of high school..." Fifth year???

I really had a chuckle over that one.

Keep Writing and Thank You for the story.

calflashcalflashover 9 years ago
no one

can write a story so convoluted and with multiple stories going on. Thanks for the excellent submission

JackallsJackallsover 9 years ago
Longer ain't better

I understand theneed for a longer story. Usually that means that a lot is going on. However the story you've written could easily do without 6 of the twelve pages. Longer means more action or more boredom. Unfortunately your story belongs to the latter category. Know your limitations or put more action in it.

rightbankrightbankover 9 years ago
you left one out

"There are some really great writers out there who've shown me all of the tricks of the divorce game. Guys like C-Pete, HueDogg, Rehnquist and DQS1 know these things inside and out."

and StangStar06?

it has to be true, after all, . . . . .

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
DAMN YOU!!! SS06!

I get da whole ideo of da wife hating/disliking the MUSTANG but it's always "a stupid CAR","a fucking CAR" or some othr shit.I just jumpd from page 6 to right here JUST TO VENT myself.I do feel that those lines a bit Real&might have occurred to you in real life but us OTHER Enthusiasts of Good 'ole MUSCLE CARS would APPRECIATE it if u stop using dat term.Thank you. Now I gotta head back2page6&finish this!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
Your great stories

I really enjoy the way you have consequences in your stories.

So many writers on this site are:

Oh honey I know I cheated honey and let you eat me just after another man fucked me and had you raise another mans baby. But Im sorry let's get back together in a romantic way k ?

I get so tired of sordid fouled relationships being rationalized as romantic forgiveness

instead of what they are.

Rhsc1Rhsc1over 8 years ago
Still

A great story, even the second time around.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Excellent

The part about ryans lawyer talking all that shit and foghorning it was funny as hell.

I enjoyed this one immensly.

Taffbanjo2013Taffbanjo2013over 8 years ago
A Brilliant Story....

and very well told.

I've really liked all of Stang's stories that I've read so far.

Does this makes me a bad person.........?

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
I feel the sadest for Joe Bob.....

Seems like there will be no happy ending for him......Great story otherwise...

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Maybe it's just me

But if your spouse had an online friend, that you knew nothing about, for over a year and felt good enough to send them flowers and prop them up when they were feeling down, wouldn't you consider that emotional cheating. I would!

cloudwolf0983cloudwolf0983about 8 years ago
I agree about Joe bob

Guy deserved a better deal, maybe he could have ended up with Betty...I know it's a small stretch, but hey...I'm going for the Hollywood ending here..good guys get good things

AnonymousAnonymousabout 8 years ago
Great read but someone had to have known a real ASSHOLE to write this well.

I have never known someone as reprehensible as Ryan. Either you are a very good writer or you knew someone with as shitty a personality as Ryan, a user/looser. As a trained psychoanalyst, I don't understand the personality of Ben's ex-wife. If Ben was as good for her as the story line stated, she wouldn't/shouldn't have done the cheating she blamed on her college experiences. I'll have to read more stories to see StangStar06 is THAT good a writer.

rabbitreaderrabbitreaderabout 8 years ago
Great Read!

This is the first of the story's of StangStar06 that I've read. The author has some real talent and I'm looking forward to reading more of his work. I like sexy stories, but so many have no plot. This one had it aced.

nancyharpman17nancyharpman17about 8 years ago
All The Cheaters Expected More Than They Deserved

There is ALMOST a feeling of sympathy for the three cheaters; then I remember what they did to cause them all to lose great treasures in exchange for a crappy life. Then I think, 'There are a lot of sad people in this world...people with children with cancer...or a pregnant woman with no means of support...or a homeless veteran'...then I realize, 'At least these cheaters deserve to have their lives destroyed.'

AnonymousAnonymousabout 8 years ago
sicknesses

Nymphomania can cause problems.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
my only issue

Stang, the only issue I have with this is there is no way a third string quarterback that never took a snap would ever sniff a college locker room. Other than that awesome story.

Saxon Hart

bachgenbachdrwgbachgenbachdrwgover 7 years ago
There is no such thing

as a "retarded kid". Edit that comment out if you have any integrity whatsoever.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 7 years ago
@bachenbachdoggy

Sure there is

LOOK INTO A MIRROR

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
@saxonheart

SaxonHeart I don't know about that for the last several years Michigan's starter wouldn't have made Ohio States 3 string :)

O-H-I-O

A Buckeye's Fan

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
A Little Confusing at First

Long story but worth it. I admit I was confused at first the swapping of the story between couples but after the first 3 or 4 pages realize what was going on and put it all together. I loved how Melanie turned from a beaten down rug into a beautiful Amazon. I love what happen to Ryan also, he was moving up to his potential. Greg and Sandy got their just rewards. Betty ended up far better off also. The one thing I would of changed if not for Tabitha's sake but for Joe Bob's was that all the children were actually Joe Bob's and even if this goes against "BTB" that the part where Tabitha thought they could go back to school and make something of themselves and really become a family happened.

Xzy89c1Xzy89c1over 6 years ago
Third string and never played in high school

He is second string in college. Right. Could not keep going after that.

widowedidiotwidowedidiotover 6 years ago
Romance?

I had to stop and walk away from my laptop for a while, I just couldn't stop laughing at that extra free pack of balogna, other than that the whole story is just more of the same crap I keep reading here, only longer and more characters, cheater get caught and divorced, victim finds somebody else and ends up with the prettiest person alive and more money than they can spend in two lifetimes. cheater winds up broke and alone wondering what went wrong. and then you just rushed the ending leaving more questions than answers. So who was the cheater here? It seems like Melanie had been in this affair a lot longer than what you're trying to make us believe. how could she be in love with somebody she only knew online? and before the divorce is final she's moved in with him and gotten pregnant. The ending just didn't make sense at all. you tried to paint Ben as a man of high morals, yet he didn't have a problem fucking another mans wife while the husband was restrained. and the wife was no better. if she did that to Ryan. What will she do to Ben when she tires of him also? Ryan should had let Melanie release the tape, that way he could show that the wife that had been playing the martry was actually a cheat and sued the hack out of them for unlawful restraint to add to the rest of the charges. Actually you made her out to be worse than Ryan. And Ben turned out not to be the nice guy you had started with.

Chief3BlanketChief3Blanketabout 6 years ago
Overall a fine story

It got a little confusing at first as new characters came on stage and I went back and reread a few pages to sort it out.

It has been a long time since this once very prolific author published a story. I hope he will again post one on Lit and that he is in good health.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
Dear Chief,

Stang chose to leave the site some time ago. I'm not sure I remember if he explained his reasons. But you can find him on the other site, where I read a newer story of his just last week.

kinkyleo7274kinkyleo7274almost 6 years ago
What other site is Stang posting

What is this other site that Stang is posting nowadays?

Seeker1107Seeker1107almost 6 years ago
@kinkyleo7274

He’s posting on http://www.storiesonline.net

Decent website, not as much feedback as here, but the flamers and the anonymous comments aren’t really out there for all to see. Also, harder for people to plagiarize from him.

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
I'd drop all of them in an instant if it ever threatened my marriage and they all knew that,

And yet, if it wasnt a threat to her marriage why did she need to hide it from her husband?

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Good story, bad ending

I was completely on Ben and Mel's side until the ending. After pulling that shit in the hotel room my image of both of them changed. They are also scum whom I could not respect. I would love to see Ryan stick it to them somehow, or something bad happen to the two of them and I know Ryan is an asshole!

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Bang! Bang!

Great read.

A good decent man loves the devil, takes a while find out about her, tells us all about how he feels & exacts appropriate punishment.

Take Five

chaoddicchaoddicover 5 years ago
Loved it

One of the best storues on here.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 5 years ago
Claps, Claps, Claps.....

Wonderful !!!!! Thank you.

calibammacalibammaover 4 years ago
Bull shit

That smug bitch, Ben, and that old rich bastard would have been buried alive in the same grave...pussy ass Weak writer.. Yeah yeah yeah you guess it I’m a very sore loser. Now someone rewrite this with the mess the expected ending. Sorry writer but enough is enough 😂

Grimjack01Grimjack01over 4 years ago
Weregilt

I loved it, get your revenge by doing good and have a great life, it worked for me.

PowersworderPowersworderover 4 years ago

The comments condemning Melanie for cheating are amusing.

She had been married to Ryan for 10 years and dated him for a couple more years before that, and the asshole had cheated on her constantly that entire time. The poor woman was heartbroken by his infidelity, but he'd also been neglecting her for over a decade. When she caught Ryan cheating again after forgiving him before, she finally snapped and couldn't take any more.

Melanie even tried to give Ryan an incredibly generous divorce settlement so that she could move on with her life, but the asshole insisted on dragging it out for as long as possible. He deserved everything she did to him in the hotel room and far worse. She could have just spoken to her father and had Ryan removed from her life... so he was very lucky he didn't get hospitalised.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 4 years ago
confusing

Since i do this semi-professionally. Please note, you displace the proper names of the characters in several places. Where "Ben" should be listed, the name "Ryan" is placed - etc.

You attempted to write a nice compound/complex story but only confused yourself. I see the lure of becoming one of the "greats" (as you kindly mention), but maybe let us call this a one off and go on writing about cars and leave the romance to others more qualified (humor - sorry). Nice try nonetheless, but useless in the end as I wasn't entertained.

Smokepole

It takes a lot more than a Ford to get us northern Michiganers riled - gimme my HEMI!

MarkT63MarkT63over 3 years ago
Karma.

I love a good karma story!!!

SithLord6969SithLord6969over 3 years ago

Awesome!

Guilty are punished, the good folks live happily ever after. Great story

AnonymousAnonymousabout 3 years ago
Sandy ruined it for me

It was good, but sandy issues and personality was my breaking point. Of all the characters she felt the most messed up but not totally worthless. Even when Ben had his revenge it felt to cruel. It’s loving wives, your suppose to pay for your crimes. Sandy was broken I felt she just got the psycho rap. Ben was just as psycho for his turn around. I still feel like she should have been giving some type of redemption. Over love your style and was total captivated. Honestly was holding out for some way for sandy to survive.

brian_scoobybrian_scoobyabout 3 years ago

Great story! Loved it! Would have loved to see Tabitha and Joe Bob reconcile a bit more for a better future; but I have my hope for them. Maybe a story about those two?!?! Thank- you for your writing! Very entertaining and enjoyable!

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