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by FD4511/17/12

I hate going first but blame it on the time zones

Technical Skill: Hmm. Either my eyes are not what they once were, I've gotten used to the Stang's errors or he's improved in quality. I didn't see a LOT of misplaced commas, and even noted a couple missing ones, but as I said, I didn't notice for SOME reason.

Plot: So...this guy who is REALLY successful marries a whore and loves her with all his heart and SHE also loves him with all HER heart...but she still cheats and rips both of their hearts apart and she never gets over it, while he can't step outside his door without tripping over a woman who is hotter and truer. That plot seems...familiar somehow...I don't mind if you keep writing the same story with the same characters, but don't be upset if people call you on that. Whatever happened to "Cancer" or "Butt Dial Breakup"? Their were SOME blatant similarities, but in the first, I thought the motive of the woman to cheat was MUCH better and in the second, the fact that green green grass was rarer than anticipated made the story seem quite real. It could be you did a better variation on the theme or maybe I was still new to Stang so it still seemed bright an new.

Versimilitude: Guys didn't recognize a BB gun? Really? And there is a term for what Ben and Mel engaged in: it's called an emotional affair. But God forbid we imply that Ben isn't a moral paragon who would ever short his wife in ANY way. Because guys can spend HOURS chatting with strange women and spend money on them without harming his primary relationship...(THAT would have been a motive and a story to sink one's teeth into) I can understand why a woman would cheat, particularly with a Beta Male like Ben. But I can't understand her gangbanging half the neighbors or allowing STRANGERS to come and fuck her. I really wish I could meet a cheating wife whose motives I understand (see Cancer, The Love Boat, Curiosity)

Likability: It was a breezy romp. I liked the extra dimensions by adding Tabitha. But even a scoundral wouldn't call himself "style over substance'. He'd say appearances are incredibly important.

Except for the repetition and the motive, most of the comments are quibbles. The other...well, it's like a Michael Bay film. You're going to get Boobs and 'Splosions so what did you think going in, you'd get Meryl Streep? You know what you're getting every time with a Stang story...and the people seem to like it. I keep coming back.

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by Anonymous11/17/12

A breath of fresh air

I disagree with FD45 I really liked the story. He told us in the beginning that there might not be any likeable characters here. This is one of those stories that you have to think about. I think the story was about levels of cheating. is it wrong to sit on a computer and chat with a person for a months when you could be spending that time and energy on your marriage or is it more wrong to actually go out and screw someone outside of your marriage. Then there's the guy who thinks his wife is boring so he goes out and fucks his best friends wife. The woman who gets boinked behind the supermarket was funnny. The trailer couple were the biggest tragedy though because at first I thought he was an asshole especially after he hit her. I think it was a great story and one that I'll think about for a long time. the problem is that a lot of us including me come here for a porn story something quick and sexy I admit that i read the first few pages and then went and read other stories and came back to this one after I got my sex fix but of all the stories I read this one is probably the best

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by Anonymous11/17/12

FD45, you might want to edit your own comments before passing judgement on Stangstar's, you used THEIR instead of there. I really don't think you needed a comment that was almost as long winded as Stangstar's story.

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by sengimax11/17/12

Great as Usual

Always a good read. I look forward to your stories they make my week. Always entertaining, with a twist, you are a natural story teller.
Many Thanks

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by cueball96111/17/12

Great, As Usual

Five stars. Need I say more?

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by dinkymac11/17/12

Great!!!

Thanks for a great read!

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by bruce2211/17/12

Really it was not enjoyable, for me.

I guess I prefer to like the characters. Using the same phrases and doing the same dance steps over and over again causes causes my attention to wander, or perhaps I am just in a bad mood!

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by Duna11/17/12

SS06 explains well Sandy's nature!

@ FD45 I stopped at the begining of the 3d pages and the Author explains well Sandy became a nympho. A nympho could cover her nature for some years. If the husband is lucky he guess befor children birth.
I think our critics for sexual majority husband character using writer MUST (not should) BE FRIENDLY, because there were more days, when sexual majority character using story was not published here. I think more sexual majority husband story Authors was chased from here for the not too friendly critics and the offenders.
The first name is whom I remeber BeerMaker, who complained in his selfcomment for the offenders.
BTW I carry on reading, because this story will be interesting.

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by Danger0911/17/12

OMG ---I fucking loved it !!!!!....

It was so worth the two week wait! I couldn't stop reading, I actually loved Ben & Melanie , the only ones I really didn't care for was Ryan , gutter slut sandy, & the 4 guys sandy the cum slut was fucking. Wow this story was a bit different from your other stories --- but it was good different, this story had a brain dead slut wife & a brain dead husband who was lazy, stupid & greedy. The story had me LMAO ; ) Ok something sandy said that really irked me a bit was "if I thought for a second that this would jeopardize my marriage to Ben I'd drop"em like a hot potato --here's the thing, I've read this same line over a hundreds time in the LW category & I always get a little peeved ( I don't know why..... I have a very low tolerance for stupidity) . That's the most dumbest shit I've ever heard, I mean really; did she expect Ben to just say; oh, its ok honey, you couldn't of possibly have anticipated that I'd divorce your dirty ass when I found you getting fuck'd by four men; two of whom were my friends. I thought it was freaking hilarious when sandy asked nick to lick her pussy... Ha! This bitch must have an I.Q of a mushroom, why would she assume that any man would put his lips on her swampy pussy?! Lords knows what's crawling in there; although I'm kinda of confused as to why nick & Greg refused to eat her pussy but didn't mind fucking her bare?!--- sandy misrepresented her self when she married Ben, she was whore the day they met, she had no business starting a relationship & getting married. I never will understand women like sandy, here she never had a man who truly loved & cared for her, who didn't treat her like the round heel cheap whore that she really is & yet that wasn't enough for her, she intentionally shitted on him, & I don't exactly understand her reasoning for doing it, she gets one shitty orgasm & then gets ready for her husband to supply him with as much sloppy pussy he can handle. I don't understand why ?! She's been cheating on the poor bastard for a year or more, she's slept with thousands of guys , I don't get why she did it... She claims they just prepare her for her husband but if Ben really turn her on like she said she wouldn't of needed to fuck the neighbors . I think she's just a fucking slut, she can try to rationalize or justify it any way she pleases but it still equals "gutter slut". I didn't notice in the story where sandy had a job, maybe this was the problem, she had way too much time on her hands, if she had a job she would be too tired to fuck four men at once... The bitch was lazy, I think her & Ryan would be perfect for each other .. I usually don't condone cheating regardless of the situation but this story has me contradicting myself in regards to Melanie & Ben, Ben'd wife was born a lazy slut, Melanie's husband was a fucking scum bag who deserved getting his dick cutoff, I don't know why anyone would marry an individual for money & prestige; so technically Ryan committed a fraud by marrying Melanie & sandy committed a fraud by marrying Ben because she was a whore when she met him & she continued to be so with thousands of different men ; so therefore the marriage contract became void. I don't know what the fuck that stupid bitch tabby was going through but the bitch needed to step back & wooh-sa, because she's been cheating on her husband for years yet she's agitated that he's fucking her cousin ( although that was gross) but they both were cheaters, she even threw the fact that some of the kids weren't his--shit I'd slap the taste buds out that bitch mouth too ( I don't condone this either) someone women just aren't happy with what they have, they don't appreciate their spouse, they don't know what they want, she tried to get a replacement husband by spreading that cesspool she calls a twat around town, thinking her shit is made of platinum. I hope tabby's husband dump her sorry ass. Everybody in this story was in fact a cheater. I soooooooooo love this story, I'm still laughing. Oh, I don't understand why sandy cracked Greg's head open? What did he say to make her snap? I don't get why Betty is still friends with sandy when sandy's been fucking & sucking her husband for a year possibly more? Sandy don't know the definition of friendship & the bitch knows jack shit about marriage. I have to say I enjoyed the hotel scene with Ryan tied up & Melanie getting some good dick, I usually can't stand women who tie up their husbands & make them watch them fucking some dude but in this was different, she demanded a divorce & he refused, she told him she wanted to get fuck'd; she never told Ryan he'd be the one fucking her, that just goes to show Ryan only thinks with his dick. I so can't wait for next weeks. I loved loved loved this story

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by ythebadger11/17/12

I just couldn't identify

any of the characters as 'real' people, somehow. It wasn't a bad story - not by any means, but there was a lot of LW formula within it.

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by cpete11/17/12

4 stories in 1!

Bonus! Four great stories with interwinding plots! Well done. How you managed the large number of charaters and their interations was first rate. A really fine read

And thanks for the shout out

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by Anonymous11/17/12

Echoing Cpete and Danger09...

I fucking loved it! 4 stories in one....Yes!




OldMarineVet Ron Wood

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by longrifle30811/17/12

too long

belongs in the novel section. I won't read anything more than 6 pages.

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by tazz31711/17/12

HIGHER MATHEMATICS IS DIFFICULT TO UNDERSTAND

but to comprehend arithmatic by rote makes for practice, TK U MLJ LV NV

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by Anonymous11/17/12

zero

that was not even a story. just pure filth. you really live in a great world but I don't want even the best part of it. if you would be able to explain what should be erotic about this shit would be president of the US. but you are not.

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by cirkarn11/17/12

First for me

Hmmm, interesting this is the first time I have read about a guy watching his wife getting screwed and not having my stomach roll over like it does when I pick the wrong kind of loving wife story. I have enjoyed most of your stories and adored some. Still haven't entirely figured out why you put your Mustangs away for the winter, unless it is to protect them from rust. As far as snow, sure they slip but that just means you do all kinds of slick driving, lol, though don't get carried away. One time I was fooling around as I made a turn and slid up sideways up right up to a gas pump. I got out and fueled up like I meant to do that, lol, but I bet my eyes were probably as big as the gas attendant's eyes as I slid toward the gas station. Anyway, how about someone driving in the winter and having some fun?

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by Sidney4311/18/12

"Please don't," I said. "You're too pretty to have yourself marked up."

Yeah, you got that right for sure. Can't figure out why beautiful women with lovely skin want to ruin it with tats and then think everyone should ooh and aah over them????

Pretty good story, but kind of a theme we have read before. I did like the several references to it being against the law to lie on the Internet and the line about a woman knowing instantly if there was a chance they would have sex was good too.

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by Duna11/18/12

Ha Ha Ha

"Guys like C-Pete, HueDogg, Rehnquist and DQS1 know these things inside and out."
Not only Harry In Va and me were mentioned in a SS06 story.
Tomorow I will carry on reading.

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by FD4511/18/12

I should give a shout out

to the fact that there WERE multiple and interrelated stories. I understood Tabitha. I did. She had poor but valid motives. Do I think she'll be alone forever....probably, but that is a function of her kids and not her appearance.

Most women find someone else, but the whistfulness of 'The One That Got Away' (if THEY did not pull the trigger) grates the soul.

Ryan was just a cardboard cut out, though I found the lawyer amusing.

The best part of the story was when the neighbor came over and her reflection held a mirror to the Ben's wife which was an ugly ugly image. I can see the wife of a ONS feeling that way (by the time you reach Sandy's level, the rationalization equipment is already on and going Warp 10) but it was a nice tool to shake her out of her idiocy.

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by Anonymous11/18/12

THE BABE HITS A FOUR BAGGER

So good to read a rock solid StangStar06 story again. As usual you took us on a trip and made the ride enjoyable.

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by Duna11/18/12

5 stars

What about clishes: Cervantes used the knight novel clishes and he wrote an excellent......Swift used the utopia and adventurous sea story clishes and he wrote an excellent.....Dickens used the cardbox characters and he wrote..........
Clishes and cardbox, but we readers got a humorouse story I am sorry, because we got 4 humorous stories.

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by SLOgent11/18/12

Welcome Back

Now THIS is the SS06 I have come to enjoy and admire. Forget the crazy shit of the past few weeks. It is beneath you.

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by Twosheddz11/18/12

Tip of the Hat

Another well crafted story. I just about shit when I clicked on the page dropdown and saw 12 effin' pages. Loved every one of them. Bravo.

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by stinger8211/18/12

Laughed when I read ..........

Nick hated tuna.

Classic!

I loved it (and the whole story) although I'd like to have seen Joe Bob come out a bit better at the end.

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by Anonymous11/18/12

Oh God!

12 pages to ditch the wife? I'll vote after reading this.

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by Anonymous11/18/12

12 pages of cucking and cream pies?

No thanks.

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by dustydingo11/18/12

Well........

Your a great author.
Enjoyed it , but I personally don't think it was one of your best.
I lked the theme but to me something was missing. ...And I can't think what is missing, so maybe I'm just expecting too much perfection from a perfect author.

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by user11011/18/12

missing... something?

well, it doesnt seem quite like you phoned this one in, but there's no emotion in any of the 12 pages.

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by Anonymous11/18/12

Bit sanctimonious this one

The "heroes" we're already cheaters they just hadn't slept together. Emotional cheating for a year is just as bad as " it's just sex" cheaters.

So no innocents and if anything I felt for Sandy more than any of them. Treated badly, sorted her shit out, slipped, realized the "mistake" and planned to end it, why just once more, and get back on track. Only to have another dickhead keep the pressure on.

Ultimately unsatisfying read - but appreciate the effort, it's more than I could do:-)

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by TheAnonYmous11/18/12

Bland and insipid..

why write a story when you have nothing new to write about..all of your recent stories have been more or less sharing the the same cheesy plot..you used to be a good and original story teller but recently something seems to have changed....dressing up a dud with snazzy catch phrases, one-liners and corny dialogue doesn't a story make..you need to take a long break and recharge your creative juices

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by hawkeye000711/18/12

Good Story

Mustang man, please ignore the anonymouse assholes that read your stories and then slam them. Most of us like most of your stories. Keep em coming.

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by jeeter4u11/18/12

Page 9

I have jumped to the end to suggest you check out page nine. I don't know if it can be straightened out now or not but it definitely needs help. Given that I suffer from what is known in polite company as brain flatus, I had to comment swiftly! now, back to the story.

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by Anonymous11/18/12

confusing

this was confusing but i still liked it very much

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by karan987611/18/12

5 stars.

I gave it 5 Stars, need I say more?

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by frontlinecaster11/18/12

Very well written, I liked the intersecting stories and different viewpoints, and nice to see you have the cheating guy's perspective included. Five Stars.

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by cantbuymy11/19/12

the master of the stupid wife, combined with a stupid husband, is back. a lot of fun. 5

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by dbduke11/19/12

Only One Word

"OUTSTANDING"!!!!!

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by thefranz11/19/12

The next step in your storytelling

Of course there are SS06's trademark "stupid cheating partners" but the multiple viewpoints were done very well and blended seamlessly. You are surely getting better. A great read.

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by trashmantx11/19/12

Five *'s as always

Stupid Ryan

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by Belgium11/19/12

Variations on a theme

Some good, some bad but all in all variations on a theme. It seems to me that SS06 – although a great writer – is starting to repeat himself. I thus like it when he treads on new ground and changes to other themes, for instance more romantic or other types of story content like the woman being the innocent party in stead of the cheater. This one however is one of the same old mold. But it’s when you leave your standard repertoire of the standard cheating wife/clueless husband that you wrote some of your greatest stories. So keep expanding your horizon! With this I’m not saying it wasn’t good – no SS06 story can be called bad or even mediocre – but it’s not one of your greatest hits.

I thus disagree with Duna and I think that was a faulty comparison. There is a big difference between an author writing a cliché story (Cervantes in the analogy) or one who follows a generally/socially accepted theme, and an author who keeps repeating himself and his own stories. Cervantes, Swift didn’t keep copying the content of their own stories to write new ones. While plagiarism might be the the highest form of flattery, self-plagiarism isn’t.

As to this story I humbly think SS06 should have limited it to the two main story lines and four viewpoints which were excellent. The Tabitha and Joe Bob storyline though was not necessary to the overall story and reads pretty much as an intercalated afterthought. You didn’t flesh out that storyline and it clearly suffers from it. Perhaps it was originally meant to be stand alone/separate story which you didn’t completed but recycled here? It had lots of potential to be an autonomous story but now it seems to be somewhat of a dud.

I agree with Sidney43 as in the fact I too don’t understand why men or women want to automutilate by having ink permanently needled into their skin… and off course later often comes the regret and you’re stuck with it. Plus, depending of the size of the tattoo, society immediately classifies someone with big tattoo’s as a lower class person.

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by hawkeye000711/19/12

No One To like

Mustang man, you were correct when you said there is no one to like in this story. Personally, I like to identify with the main character. This story was hard to read.

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by Anonymous11/20/12

GOOD READ

GOOD READ

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by hoosier7611/22/12

While at first I had a hard time going from one person/circumstance, I easily adapted to the flow because of your writing ability. I disagree with an earlier comment though, I liked and (if you will) was routing for the right things to happen to Melanie and Ben.

Thanks

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by Anonymous11/23/12

DUNA ... the difference between YOU and Harryin VA is that

Harry's posts and analysis are never the same. I had been reading Harry's reviews and feedback for a couple of years and honestly ...I have no idea what he is going to say about ANY story. From my point of view the guy is totally unpredictable and it is that aspect of him which is what makes his reviews somewhat different . Even though sometimes his e spelling is atrocious (and one could make the case that the guy is bipolar) Harryin VA brings something new to the table almost every time he posts in the feedback section . And I think for that reason there are often a lot of comments about Harry's comments.

YOU on the other... are predictable dull and boring. Often I fall asleep reading your feedback/ reviews. And if you bother to take a look around you would see that very few people actually end up talking about any sort of feedback / review that YOU ..Duna... has ever posted.

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by Duna11/23/12

To read it is not obligatory

@ Dear Anon I write my comments for my pleasure and if you feels like boring DO NOT READ!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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by rcrmonte311/23/12

Another Good One

As usual, Stang, this is a good, well-developed story. Good plot and another happy(/) ending--at least for 2 people. 2 things--Melanie turned into Sandy once during that first "naked dinner", and I'll email you about the other.

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by maxx30811/24/12

Fantastic story

Thanks for sharing SS06, your stories are always a pleasure to read.

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by OLDED11/25/12

Nobody

Forces anyone to read any story written here.
If you have a comment---Good---OR---Bad.
At least have the courage to sign your name.

Good story, Fun read
Thanks

ED

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by Anonymous11/30/12

Seriously Bad People

A lot of seriously bad people and probably the worst is Ben
He had been betraying emotionally long before his wife betrayed physically

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by Rhomanov12/30/12

Difficult read

I ended up skipping chapters first read as this story wandered all over the place. I did reread fully and found it disjointed.
Characters changed emotionally with little to no reason development behind them. I needed a roster to keep track of who was who based on character development as it did not align to their names or proposed roles.
Could have been a good story.

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