by MSTarot
Thank you for sharing this sexy little treat of a post! I think that we all can relate to the innocent , yet occasionally daring Holiday shopping flirtation that occurs in our shopping malls this time of the year. Toss in a side of peppermint stick and this was just scintillatingly fun.
Great story. Even after the holiday competition you should write another chapter to this story.
Cute story, but with minor spelling errors. I hope Tim goes back to the mall again and meets Amber for more visual fun.
Cute story, but with minor spelling errors.
But why should Tim go back to the mall. There are other places for the voyeur in him to satisfy himself, and retain his marriage vows. Think of Bill Clinton.
Amusing tale. Sometimes the teasing is enough to get through the day.
So deliciously naughty! Can't wait to see if they run into each other again!
I'd like to see if it leads anywhere, definitely a good start to wet the appetite though.
Waiting to see if it leads anywhere. Looking forward to a part 2 if there is one.
Just let it stand as is. He's married, she's young enough to be his daughter. I liked the fact that it was just a mutual play on fantasies and stopped there. Excellent job, author.
looking back through the story it needed another pass for miss spellings and I've had a post showing me ways I could have edited it better. Shrug.
I write for fun. Not trying to write the 'Lay' of Gilgamesh with this one, just a fun little story to pass the time with.
I'm glad people are enjoying it.
Happy Holidays
Thank you for taking the time to write your story. I enjoyed it. The way you included self-deprecating humor actually made your main character more attractive. Don't worry too much about your proofreading errors. The mistakes weren't enough to detract from my enjoyment of the story. Merry Christmas!
loved the story...just the sort of thing i would have done as a teenager ;)