A Daughter's Love

FANTASEX?

Confusing. Makes little sence. Stupid. Desreve a negative 20 vote. A total waste of time reading. It just proves nobody looks this crap over before letting it be published here. If they did, CRAP like this would never be seen, or read by anyone!

Not fantasex.

I'm sorry you didn't like it. The other chapters are being reviewed. This first part is a setup for the rest of it.

I was going to say that Francine's shifts in mood seemed to be a little too extreme to be credible - going from "Tears poured down Francine's face. She trembled uncontrollably. " to "Francine leaned forward. There was a strange gleam in her eyes. A gleam she didn't trust." in the space of a few sentences. That it's all an act does serve to explain this, of course, though it then becomes a little odd that Elise would not find her mood swings to be suspicious.

Anyway, that's just something of a quibble that struck me as I was reading it. The story certainly has potential; I'll be looking out for the rest as it arrives.

It wasn't bad. The person who left that rude comment was probably drunk... lol

Enjoyable, but...

I would have preferred reading about Elise. ;)

definitely piqued my interest

Wild lead in to the tale.

hmmm

I so wanna fuck my daughter..