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Oh.
I thought the writing style looked familiar, then I realized when the girls started chatting to each other like nothing was going on that you're the same author that wrote the Rio story. Seriously, if they're going to chat with each other, have them do it between rounds so that it doesn't look like either their lady parts are so big or their companions man parts are so small that they aren't feeling anything? Generally, when the sex is any good, you're too busy enjoying it to engage in idle chatter. "Tup tup cheerio old lass, what do you think of the weather today?"
There's really no sense of non-con or reluc to this story at all. Neither said no or protested in the first chapter, neither objected in the second. They're not mute's or prisoners with their tongues cut out - they can speak for themselves, or at LEAST you can show their thoughts beyond a retarded stray thought from Nicole about how Jen is being raped. Jen was clearly not being raped and was enjoying every second of it.
I can get over the second issue, because humiliation/exhibition is close to reluc, but the first half sucks the eroticism out of your story.
Hot Story
I love to camp and now I'll have some extra sweet dreams while camping. Great story, erotic - and I would call that non consent so forget what the 1st anon said. I enjoyed it very much - keep writing!!!
confusing
this story doesn't match chapter one... this is a dumb story, and I like rape stories
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